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Magnificently Flawed

if only we could centre these little scribbles ..

Magnificently Flawed

Although
at first, she seemed
beautiful yet small, like some
little gem perhaps, it very soon became
more apparent to him that she had more flaws
than both the Empire State Building and Post Office towers ..

 

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Gwendoline

Hi Neville, I do like the play on words here. The title โ€œMagnificently Flawedโ€ could hint at the fact that he is almost relieved to find the imperfections. I think they make us more human. But then maybe he just realised she was so very false. There is more than one way to look at this piece. Which makes it all the more fun to read my friend 

Many thanks for sharing your clever little write ๐Ÿ˜Š
Gwen x 

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Neville

I am more than just grateful Gwen I am made up by the fact you have looked beyond the printed word and considered other possibilities ..
I wonder, did you by any chance spot the deliberate play on words .. 

Many thanks back at you for the kind consideration and in depth perusal ๐Ÿ˜Š

Neville x

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Gwendoline

Are you meaning about the fact the empire state building has many floors? Maybe she has many layers to her? I mean she is a gem, maybe she comes with many facets? ๐Ÿ™ƒ there is a lot that could be going on in this fab little piece x 

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Neville

it seems you not only got me, but you can see write through me too .. so now you can choose between a coconut, a cigar or a goldfish ... x

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Gwendoline

Playing with the word "write" too Neville ๐Ÿ™ƒ I won't pick a goldfish, wouldn't want to trap it in a tank. I don't smoke, so I will opt for the tasty coconut please, its a good healing food too. Plus I could always make myself a fresh coconut  Piรฑa Colada hehe ๐Ÿน๐Ÿฅณ๐Ÿ™‚

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Neville

great minds think alike .. do you want it posted, hand delivered or to collect ๐Ÿ™ƒ   

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Being Me

A clever write Neville. A diamond is a gem and flaws make them more valuable I believe. Perhaps this lady sparkled all the more for her flaws. Your writing is always very clever x

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Neville

I am blushing as brightly as any diamond ever shined ... thank you so much for continuing to show an interest in my scribbles Tina ............. x

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Neville

thank you so very much Greg :) 

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Tony Taylor

Sir NEVILLE!!....it seems that you do much more than "play with words" my friend......your interests appear to lay far beyond facade......ALL STARS!....ever the pleasure!!.......T xo  : )

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Neville

I've said it before but I feel compelled to say it again my friend .. you are far too generous .. but I like it :)

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Marion

This made me smile lol...haven't we all been here, still...I often find it comforting that we are indeed all so flawed...well, I certainly am. You know though...I heard a lovely phrase the other day...God knows where...it was this...'it is the cracks that let the light in'
this Comforts me on the rare occasions I review all my wrinkles ๐Ÿ˜๐Ÿ˜†๐Ÿ˜† x

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Neville

Thanks for stopping by Marion visits from your good self are always welcome and more than merely appreciated .. I think the saying you refer to might belong to Leonard Cohen .......................... Hope you are well my friend and not working too hard x

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