The Man Who Left No Memory
I open the door to my father's room
for the first time since he died
It was here I saw his face last time
So I turn and walk inside
But the walls are painted over
New bed standing in a different place
His presence is gone, forever;
he has left without a trace
Though pictures on the wall
Speak of him
From a young man
To what he became
In my mind's eye
I'm looking to find a memory
Of this man and me
My life flashes by
in the blink of an eye
I look for him
but not a trace I can find
From the very beginning
Nowhere in my life
He was ever around.
Something obscure,
I'll settle for;
But nothing to be found
So I headed to the door.
And without shedding a tear
I swear to myself;
Cause no one else would hear;
I would never come back here
I could never come back here
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This is absolute relevance ..........and poetic genius in the final four lines.............I love your stuff brother.............excellent write..............love and rockets.............T xo
T you're the best big brother ever, thanks man; I have to thank my boy Robert Frost again for giving me the confidence to attempt the last two lines; was never sure how they would come across, then I remembered the words of the man....glad you said what you said, your comments always make me contemplate the work, I find you invaluable for my growth, thank you Â
Mirela, thank you so very much for your encouragement, I'm honoured by your words and I'm still in awe of your electric poem ....BEHIND HAZEL EYES...that you posted today....cheers my friendÂ
This was
The feelings were perfectly executed kinda make u lose your words cuz emotions came into play ....some powerful stuff
I am left so speechless and emotional. I read and felt every word. It's deep, real and hardcore... It applied strength in me... I can't say further.
Onelove!
Regards,
Bridgette
Thank you for this one, what can I say it was beautiful, unique and I'm embarrassed to say I kept reading because I couldn't tell where it was going, which is good,... great even...I'm sorry I'm still speechless this had something from within that drew my...curiosity.. 5*
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Flower thanks for comment, lol was it the image I chose that made you cry? Â kidding, I had trouble with this one as well, very much doubt I could read it in public....cheers my friend
Cherie I agree with everything you said; but the character I feel felt loved, just didn't find it necessary to look back on something that never really existed in the first place; and didn't want to live in torment so he closed the door, it always takes two in every relationship; his with his dad never was, and now it could never be....it's sad but such is life; you can't always get all that you want....hey thanks for your insightful comment, 'Dr Sigmond' Cherie Sumner, but it's not about me, it's about my evil twin, lol...cheers pal
Tamia, thank you so much for the feedback, I can't say how much it helps me to improve as a writer...cheers my friend
Curious, I take that as the highest compliment; when you say you can't figure out where this was going...so funny I always try to do that when I'm reading poetry as well.....very cool comment, thank you very much my friend
Wow Chris, you brought my emotions high in this write. I relate to this but in a different term, which is my father chose to be dead to me. I as well had swore that I would never come back here which to be honest with you Chris, I never did go back either. Too painful, for me to encounter from that moment on. He though is the version of your father while he was alive, the ghost in the wind figure I like to call him. I truly connect with you in this poem 100% for when he was alive. My sympathies dear Chris and I will talk to you soon, xox
Sincerely,
Melissa <3
Thank you so much for commenting Dwayne, it has struck me all of a sudden that you have said it all; appreciate that unique relationship, for some may not have had it.....personally I use this write as motivation to close the door on the past and forge a better tomorrow, again thank you so much for your comment; you taught me something todayÂ
Ghost in the wind, I will have to remember that unique expression, Melissa....yes it is true that certain things can't be easily solved.....Melissa, Melissa, thank you for your comment and friendship....cheers