Me? Neither.
Disorientation, a cause for concern, a manifestation – imaging way too much.
These, hap-hazard, half-lines, half-baked thoughts – that leave you going,
“What the fuck is that?!”
I pause at such a phrase, such a critic – I am these days.
I just don’t feel like I’m myself.
I think you’re simply bad for my health.
I’m not meant to walk away.
It pains me to say,
“What else am I supposed to do?”
This feeling of unwillingness, this inability to choose.
A different path.
Like a waterslide, I’ve turned into a bath.
Like a waterfall, it’s travelled lakeside – and it’s not running too fast!
“Oh, how could I let this happen?”
I imagine. I got lost along the way.
I briefly forget that I hate this self-indulgent behaviour. But I carry on anyway.
In selflessness, I act.
In diligence I keep track.
But it seems record keeping.
That is all I’m meant to do.
If only I could walk somewhere else.
In someone else's shoes.
And I’d walk.
And I’d walk.
And I’d walk.
Till I couldn’t remember “You.”
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Nice ending. I do like
Thank you for your kind comment Rory, glad you enjoyed it!
And I'd swim towards the shore, as the fish of the sea ;)
A fun comment by Yiyan
Haha thanks Yy, glad you enjoyed!
Brilliantly done,
I love this, you imagery is fantastic
Lorna xx
Awww thanks Lorna~ Probably my favourite verse also. Your comment means a lot to me~
Max, Baker Street said it so well there, but can only add how about The Beatles and their song The Word.
Nicely done Max throughout and wondered where you were taking the reader and your ending opened new doors.
Thanks Max and your imagination into words never drops poetry ball and darned good to see :)
Shaun.👍🏼
And nearly forgot to say your video attached is also a darned good choice of chillout music.👍🏼
Haha thank you so much Shaun, I've been really enjoying reading your comments this afternoon. They have been kind and also witty! I'm glad to have you guys as friends on here, and I again apologise for not being online as much as I would want to be. Having many interests doesn't leave much time for everything, all the time, all at once!
Again mate i really do appreciate you and hope your poetry journey is flowing smoothly. I'll try to catch up when I can. I'm sure your newest is a killer!
Sincerely,
Your friend Max
Max good to be here and visit you and to make up for lost time mate.
And I haven't finished yet for venturing back to where it all began there are many more to read that caught my eye.
And that apology regarding time is a two way street, for I wish I was retired and visit here every day and read and comment more, but sadly it is yonks away for me. Bummer!
Time is the soul destroyer and all that.
And Max if you have the time and know you enjoy these things from a strength of writing angle and imagination, these things (time permitting) check out The Breach novel by Patrick Lee which is part of a trilogy.
And the Netflix series 3 Body Problem again adapted from a trilogy that is science fiction darkly done and hopefully a season 2 will be commissioned.
And Max that journey was well worth it and most rewarding.
Gotta dash now, for as usual duty calls now, but I will be popping in soon and visiting your past writes with good intentions.
Thanks Max and keep writing, stay healthy in mind, body and spirit.
And all power to your imagination, your pen, and poetry elbow my friend.👍
All good things to you, your friend Shaun