I think if I would've wrote it in normal form probably it would've got more attention ...but that's ok it got some... it sounds pretty good when I reside it . I wrote it kind of a long time ago ,,,the rhythm of it is not too shabee....some girls use to trip and say it wasn't mine that it was somebody else's . I just memorized it's all and I got good with it...what ever it's cool, you like it? "yeah"...a little history on that one...you took me back when you notice it!!! I'll tell you what's it about.... this girl I use to like a lot would talk to me about her boyfriend troubles. we would talk till very late at nite and sometimes she call me or I'll call her like at midnight or past midnight n we would talk for a long time ....that's how I got the beginning of it..."she comes out at night" because she would call me late sometimes....after I became like her back door man, you feel me! at first she talked about homie and I'll listened.. she be like am all into him...that's where I got " the kiss won't save you" also part of that movie with the princes and 7 dwarfs she gets saved by the kiss of the prince. well that's where I got "the kiss can kill you" not all first loves r the one, you know. then I describe how I felt about her" I think I love you" well that's the foundation of the poem. I must like the way you write because I opened up ! it's just a connection, probably, I guess. you may not even read this....it's cool ! I let out some steam the good kind.
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I really feel this wonderful poem of yours did not recieve the attention it should have. Very creative and the line breaks intrigue me.
thank you for noticing .....I'll read some of poetry is good I like it!
I think if I would've wrote it in normal form probably it would've got more attention ...but that's ok it got some... it sounds pretty good when I reside it . I wrote it kind of a long time ago ,,,the rhythm of it is not too shabee....some girls use to trip and say it wasn't mine that it was somebody else's . I just memorized it's all and I got good with it...what ever it's cool, you like it? "yeah"...a little history on that one...you took me back when you notice it!!! I'll tell you what's it about.... this girl I use to like a lot would talk to me about her boyfriend troubles. we would talk till very late at nite and sometimes she call me or I'll call her like at midnight or past midnight n we would talk for a long time ....that's how I got the beginning of it..."she comes out at night" because she would call me late sometimes....after I became like her back door man, you feel me! at first she talked about homie and I'll listened.. she be like am all into him...that's where I got " the kiss won't save you" also part of that movie with the princes and 7 dwarfs she gets saved by the kiss of the prince. well that's where I got "the kiss can kill you" not all first loves r the one, you know. then I describe how I felt about her" I think I love you" well that's the foundation of the poem. I must like the way you write because I opened up ! it's just a connection, probably, I guess. you may not even read this....it's cool ! I let out some steam the good kind.
thank you for your comment