Pyramid
Every make and model โ fails through opinionated thought.
The story tellers fear the Newland poet โ in which red handed they are caught.
Sirens bleed the innocent, for calls of such a halt.
What patience brings,
in complex strings.
Whatโs learnt cannot be taught.
Through my sandstone archways, and my pitfalls.
In the polished tombs, where they lay.
My dreams still haunt
the weary robber.
A price heโs willing to pay.
For whatโs more priceless than learning from oneโs mistakes.
Oneโs misplaced steps โ trigger stones that set underfoot.
Take a step back for once โ to acknowledge what was once misunderstood.
And face these feelings one by one.
Easier said than done.
Whereโs your future? Whereโs your fun?
If you stop your dead. If you look back, you regret.
If your thoughts go unsaid, theyโll never leave your head.
So, for now.
In through my sandstone archways, and my pitfalls.
In the polished tombs, where they lay.
My dreams still can't haunt me.
So thatโs just where theyโll stay.
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Hi Max, firstly sorry I am hardly here these days. I popped on just now and spotted your post. What a powerful piece to read on a day like today. I think many of us can relate to this. Reality is changing for so many of us. We are discovering as a whole, humanity has a lot to learn from so many mistakes. All is not what it seems I feel. I really enjoyed:
โFor whatโs more priceless than learning from oneโs mistakes.
Oneโs misplaced steps โ trigger stones that set underfoot.
Take a step back for once โ to acknowledge what was once misunderstood.
And face these feelings one by oneโ
Itโs hard sometimes to look back and face those errors. But when we do, the knowledge obtained can be life changing. The end of this piece leaves the reader numb. It has such a somber tone to its weight. There is an air of utter sadness in your words. A handing in the towel so to speak.ย
I also want to mention how well this reads. There is rhythm to your stanzas. You have played with the sounds of words. Which lifts the piece, enriching its content to please the reader by enhancing the tone in its meaning.ย
Brilliantย
I hope you are wellย
Gwen x
Hi Gwen! Your comment is wholeheartedly welcomed. And as always hits home. I'm glad to read your kind words and glad as always you enjoyed my take on poetry. As a matter of fact I'm overjoyed you took the time to stop by. Things definitely change. Especially for the one's that sit too comfortably! Seems like I took some things for granted, and made some mistakes, some unforgivable in the eyes of the world... quite literally. I'm not happy with any of that. But in the bitterness of truths we all make mistakes. I've just gotta accept that and learn. I can't complain overwhelmingly however, others have it a lot worse than me.ย
God youve got me ranting late at night... want i really wanted to say is Thank you and I hope things are going well for you. Please stay on the airways when you can and reach out if you want / need! Again thanks Gwen. Thank you for the read.ย
Itโs great to see you posting on here Max. I do hope you continue. Sorry things have been so hard. Always hear to lend an ear should you need one. These times have been so trying for so many. I hope there is signs of light in the path you work. That hope for better days is a mere whisper away from you. Let 2023 lift your spirit and bring you happier times ahead. Life can bring some harsh lessons our way. Itโs how we rise from those moments that matters most. Got my fingers crossed for youย
Gwen x
Thank you Gwen. Thank you so so much. I wish the best for 2023 for you also. It's good to be back, for how ever long that turns out to be. Peace to you my kind friend~
Excellent....all the best in 2023....Peace
Lorris! Thank you for your loyalty! I wasn't expecting your comment at all! Same to you my friend, I hope it's not too cold in Vancouver!! It looks bitter over there right now.
Thank you for the pep talk.ย
I needed itย .ย
You are gladly welcome Liliana.ย
I hope it helped.ย
Such a good and powerful read Max...it's good to.have you and your own unique style back...hugs x
It's good to be back Marion! For how ever long that may be. As always thank you for your kind and generous comment my friend.
Hi Fish, Lovely lovely lines... Love the ending
'My dreams still can't haunt me.
So thatโs just where theyโll stay'
Cheersย
G'day Cleo! Thank you so much for your comment. It's good to be back on Cosmo. I hope you have been doing well! Sincerely, Max.youย