Poem -
Relief
Get out of my head.
If my brain were made of paper,
I'd tear it out of my notebook skull.
Crumple it to the size of a fist,
And throw it in the nearby lake.
I'd sit and watch it float,
Peacefully downstream,
Calmly away from me.
And with every turn in the waters current,
With every twist in the rivers bend,
My soul would lighten.
At last,
I would feel relief.
Alas, my brain is less fragile than that.
Its embedded within my head,
Fixed like sedimentary rock.
And no amount of self destructive thought
Could weather it down to a more manageable size.
I guess that's why you're still in my dreams every night.
What spell do I have to cast,
To get you out of my life?
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You have a style that makes me think of D.H Lawrence's work, to be quite honest, Katie. Very raw and not pretentious in the slightest, and full of unbridled emotion. This, in my humble opinion, makes for some really weighty writing. Demure, yet leaves no room for grey areas in the acrimony you are trying to convey. Awesome work. Look forward to reading more. :)
Thank you so much for the response! Hope you like whatever I post in the future :) Means a lot.
Ride the waves of time sister
Origami
No matter how you try, your memories of a lover stay with you forever.
Thank you for sharing your soul with us.
Thank you for taking the time to read it :)
Welcome to Cosmofunnel !
Your first submissions to the site show you have a way with words using them to maximum effect to crank up emotion in the reader. Well deserved nomination for the contest. Great write !
Thanks for sharing !
Best wishes ! :)
Thank you so much!
Hope you enjoy what I'm planning on posting in the future :)
:) I am sure I will !!!
Best wishes to you !
This poem gave me chills! It definitely resonated something within me. Looking forward to more of your work!!
Val ?
Thanks so much, glad you enjoyed it :)
Hi Katie,
No sorceresses spell needed. You have multiple choices. 1. Speed Dating. 2. Party hard with girlfriends. 3. Singles events. 4. Church support groups. 5. Dear friends and Aunties blind dates. Which ever you choose, only one, or try them all, protect your heart until you know that you have finally found your soulmate. Welcome to Cosmo! Keep your beautiful words coming.
Peace an Love,
xox Larry
Thank you so much! I was just writing from a characters perspective but I'll be sure to remember this when I need it. Glad you enjoyed reading :)
Katie, the reader agrees with all that's been said, this is quite exceptional, original and polished work, I was so into every word you wrote here, very impressive....cheers
Thank you so much, glad you liked it :)
Hi Katie congratulations!
I enjoyed your write
Best wishes Debs
thank you so much :)
hey Katie, congratulations, this is superb
thanks man :)
Hello Katie...
Great job!
Congratulations!
Hugs...
sparrowsong
heyy, thank you so much :)
Thats was fairly awesome!
A handful of stars.. Love this write.