Sandstorm Part 2
Point guard.
Postponed,
Stars.
Pickpocket,
Hearts.
Tick, cross… decisions?
I Laugh!
People,
Places,
Need to,
Count pavers.
Need to, state the phases?
And sign at the line.
I ran out of time.
Listen I`m fine.
You don’t have to stare
These are.
Musical chairs.
Musical minds…
Oh, and the scare!
I`m being left behind.
And the world moves on,
And look who`s aware,
I've missed that boat.
Sailing oceans somewhere.
Form
Combine
Congeal
Survive.
While Jackhammers
Crack pavement.
That was soft from the start.
And grains of sand. Make hurricanes.
Reminding us.
Calling for us.
To meet
Their demands.
So gone.
And so near.
Yet pleasures, please.
And the wind in the sails
And Fish.
In the Sea.
Hope you enjoyed it!
Inspired by Reborn Rob and Shaun Cornick, awesome poets who always challenge me to form my work, further than I could possibly imagine.
Also a cheers to you all for supporting my work, you all mean so much to me.
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fun stuff Max! I was "blown about by every wind and doctrine!" nice write!..........................................................................................Jim
Awww shucks Jim! Thank you so much!
Well ...you certainly met the challenge Max. So much in this write!! I've read it a few times...love it x
Awww thank you so much Marion!! Glad you thought so! Hugs and calm waters your way!
Anything enjoyable is never a chore, we all adore.
Confidence is best met with a pat on the back. I have found you to be the supportive one. Thank you.
Agreed Liliana! Thanks so much! Your comments and your work inspire me my friend. Please keep writing!
Awesome write. It felt musical to read. Definitely inspired. It felt effortless. Great expression
Ahh thanks Shelley!! I really enjoyed writing this one! Touched by your comments.
You could almost put a beat to this. It has such rhythm racing through it. Brilliant write 👏✨
Ahhh! Thank you, Gwen! Heaps of fun to write like this, although sometimes a big challenge to get the flow without losing the meaning too much. Glad you liked it!! Max
Max, so glad you did a follow up for your original really poetically blew me away and deservedly and rightfully so.
And the kudos is simply and again deservedly and rightfully yours my friend.
You have written two bookend outstandingly well written journey poems that mirror each other equally so.
Both engaging, both fresh and both unique.
And said journey's are both good one's and more than enjoyed simply just reading, more absorbing and poetically engaging.
Another great write Max and another to pin next to its worthy original.
Thank you for writing and sharing Max your touch of class poem, a real tour de force my friend.
And tip my poetry hat to your good self.
Shaun! Nearly missed your comment, I gotta run in a sec! But I wanted to say thank you so much for supporting my work. Seems like your a much better commenter than me! And as you know you were one of the main reasons I decided to do part two. So, thank YOU, my friend. Hope to catch up soon. But I`m gonna miss my bus! Kudos!
Max, it is wonderful how we can all find inspiration on this site. This is a well written poem which is actually a very strong write despite it's beautiful presentation. Love it ⚘x
Awww Tina... that means so much coming from you. Really I agree, Cosmos is so awesome and super supportive. Thanks so much! Your friend Max
Hey Max...I loved the short sharp lines in this piece...i read it..it had.such a rhythm to it...like some said upbeat like a song. Its amazing to be inspired by others on here and I'm so glad you had that too with Shaun and Rob. Both amazing new poets on here! I will catch up on more soon. Px
I should have guessed... how did I miss this P?? Im so sorry. Thanks for your kind words, it really means so much. Rhythm is what I love most about poetry but sometimes I lose inner meaning! I'm glad you liked this one! Promise to catch up soon! Your friend Max