Seconds

Powerful and Effective. 

Favorite part: 

actually making eye contact
with her, is a good start,
trusting that you are going
to talk to her..and not the room..
and waiting for a response..
instead of launching into
speech after speech

There was a whole lot of power within the poem. Was this poem about a mother and a son having difficulties. Or, was the poem about a young person who has given up on life because of something bad happening to them? I would like to have read one or two stanzas more about what was going on to the character in the poem. 

Good job in your story telling technique. 

The only place that I saw that could use a little revision, is the punctuation and capitalization in the first lines. I just think it would read better. Just one thought. 

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I cannot wait to read more of your work. 

All the best and Happy Holidays from Newark, Ohio 
 

Oh I had forgotten how much I like to read your words...real feeling in each line, maybe a lucky escape as people really dont tend to change...it takes a long time to see them for who and what they are
merry xmas 
Lorna xx