Self righteous suicide
She smiles during the day
But she crys at night
She stumbles through darkness
Hoping to find the light
Can anyone see her?can anyone hear her scream?
Walking through this nightmare
Praying it was all a dream..
Her life is always in a downward spiral
Numb to this pain is it death or survival?
The ones with the biggest hearts
Always seem to be torn apart
Ripped and torn at every thread
Shredded at every regret.
When the time comes will they laugh? Or will they cry?
Will they release white doves or walk away With their head held high?
Would they realize they played a part in her pain?
Or keep tellin everyone she just went insane.
Its all left an unsolved mystery, the only difference is she no longer has to
hide
Is there really such thing as a "self righteous suicide"?
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I hope ya'll enjoy reading my piece of writing. Please comment you're feedback. Good and bad. . My mind is always open to learn more! Thank you, lynzi
So many people can relate, this is a concept many of us contenplate on a daily basis. Will anyone hear me? Will they see me for who I am? So many brilliant thoughts can be derived from such pain, in the dark times we shine our brightest light if we choose. Welcome to cosmo, excited to read more. Feel free to criticise me, knowledge is never set in stone.
Thank you so much. It really means alot to have you read it. And enjoy reading it. At times i keep my writing hidden for fear of others making fun of me . but this is real pain. Real life for me. I can't wait to write more. You have no idea how a stranger can inspire and empower you to write more. Thank you again.
You're so welcome, someone as talented as you should never fear what others think, a judgement is an idea that can always be changed. You run with the rule of new, we never play to what others believe is to be. For what we create, is new. Our own rules our own story, nobody can tell you you're wrong, and if they do, they see your potential of changing the world, and refuse to let you do what they couldn't. Never hold back.
Im still tryin to undeterstand this site. How does the writing get into the entry? Is it by the likes and votes only by other people not judges? If so then i don't really like this site. Only 1 vote i know my writing has alot more potential then that. I don't fully understand..
I'm new as well, I am still trying to figure out everything. I'm busy so actually checking it out is not in routine. I'm also mainly here for the many brilliant minds such as yours, knowledge is power.
You got any writing on here?
Click on my name.
How do you right like that. . It's AMAZING. ???
I let it come to me, my pain becomes rythm, my joy becomes rhyme, my life's music, will change the rule of time. It's nothing I do, something I feel. Thank you for your acceptance, it means a lot.
~Mark~
The title makes me think of a System of a Down song...if you haven't heard it I listened to it after reading your poem and it works well with it...
This stanza really spoke to me. People with kind, forgiving hearts are walked all over and no one thinks twice about it because they know they will be forgiven. I am one of these people and it is hard. So so hard but there's always a way through.
I agree with DBlankportrait though...I'd pretty much be copying the review word for word.
Lovely heartfelt piece, no one in my life has ever seen my poetry...well one person has and I hate it that they did because it wasn't their place but guess what I did, I forgave them...but still great write and welcome to Cosmo, I look forward to reading more of your work :)
xxxLily
No i have not ever heard of that. Maybe i should change the name? Im kind of sad now. Too me everyone wants to be self righteous but i also deal with depression and suicide feelings. I thought it would go well with what i had writen. . Thank you again for taking the time to read it. It really means alot. I don't have that much time to write the way i would love too or take the time to type in the proper format. My kids take most of my time. But reading all these other writers work as well as yourself i don't think i belong here. Im great. But yall are flawless.
Any other name wouldn't do it justice, the songs a little out there. You're poem just brought more to the song when i listened to it. Almost a better understanding? For lack of better words. Don't be sad! everyone does I believe and suicide and depression are no strangers to me, we know each other quite well. It goes perfectly with what you wrote.
Your children are lucky to have a mom like you then. But clearly when you do get the change to you produce beautiful poetry. We use formatting that's all over the place here, it's the content that matters most. I'm a sucker for rhymes. I'm trying to get out of my comfort zone right now. Everyone and anyone belongs here :) we're all here for each other. If we're flawless then you are too! If you love your work that is all that matters!
xxxLily
Love this poem Lynzi. Sorry I'm not very good at reviews but it is an excellent poem. I understand where you're coming from about keeping your poems hidden for fear of what others think. Most of mine were hidden for 6 years until I found this site recently. I still keep my identity hidden though, purely just for the content and chin up, hang in there. Everyone has dark thoughts from time to time