Poem -
Silence
A black sleep has spread
Over my entire being,
Every dream has faded,
Sleep, every desire.
I want nothing anymore,
I don't know what anything is anymore,
Neither good, nor bad.
What a sad story!
Like a cradle I am,
Moved without will,
On an empty tomb,
Silence! Silence!
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Comments
The pain in these words reach the reader, nice write x
Thank you!! ☺️☺️☺️☺️ I truly appreciate it.
I agree with Marion. Your words definitely leave the reader in no doubt. Poetically I like the mention of dream which references a previous poem. I also like the simile of the cradle and the use of I am at the end of the line rather than the start. It is effective to start the line with like.
In fact the whole last verse is a good finish to your poem.
Thank you for the feedback!!
I made this poem when I was 14 years old. My life wasn't the easiest and I always had a hard time sharing my feelings. Seeing amazing people like yourself makes me really happy... I'm happy to be understood... Supported. It motivates me so much more.
Thank you again 🙏🙏☺️
You are very welcome. It is hard to pluck up the courage to share feelings. I agree with you about the support.
Hello Lorena...
I hope you find truth, love, comfort, peace and healing here...
Encouragement if you ever need it...
Of course we know about the Wolves in Sheep's Clothing...
It can take a lot of time sometimes for the truth to surface...
But, when it pops up like an inflatable...
Those always make me laugh...
Carry On...
Right?
Great write!
Thank you for sharing...
sparrowsong
Ouch .. glad I stopped by and welcome to Cosmo my friend .. Neville
Thank you Neville 🙏😊
You are most welcome .. 😎👍
hi Lorena! nice write! welcome to cosmo!,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,Jim