Poem -
Simply there won't be
Don't ask me if I'm fine
Don't ask me either why
Don't you put your hands in mine
Don't ask me for one more chance
To make it right again
I just threw it all away
You kept me locked in a house of pain Â
You won't kick me down again
You were like an embolus in vein
You've been a stroke in my brain
Get your suitcase and goodbye
Don't you beg for one last chance
To start everything again
Simply there won't be
Cause I wanna be free.
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Hello Pier,Â
This has some excellent powerful lines crafted.Â
“You were like an embolus in vein
You've been a stroke in my brain”
How perfectly does this emphasis the corrosive effect another person can have on our lives. This truly impacts just how incompatible this person was. Great imagery here, which gives this poem a real good power punch for the reader.Â
Great writing, thanks for sharingÂ
Gwen :)Â
Thanks Gwen
Sometimes there is just no going back. Great write. "Dont ask me if I'm fine"Â the first line gives the reader insight from the off x
Thank you :)
Nice work here Pier x
Thanks Marion