Poem -
Suicides gift
She drowns in the humid air of her own breath the silk ribbons wrap her lightly In bows of death her time is so short her skin fading darker then a Angel's silhouette bellowing her silent screams are echoed against the sinful breeze she is a gift for the ocean to swallow , the wooded box so dark an hollow she feels her sinking flesh slowly falling an finds the purpose she wanted so long in life by facing death with a fatal kiss she becomes the dark angel of the ocean she is suicides gift
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very sad potral to me suicide is not a gift it is an unfinished ending a total waste
linda nice write
It's just a poem it's about a girl who lives a life unheard an the message is if we don't pay attention an listen people will mentally an physically find their own box to float off into ocean an drown you have to be intellgent to understand Linda wright
I enjoyed the poem, yet I found your insult to a fellow poet cruel.
Lorna
Well she shouldn't insult my poetry an she wouldn't get insulted same goes you Lorna caizley can't hate on my shine
Nobody insulted your poetry (if you actually cared to read the comments properly) What I did find disgusting was your complete disregard for another person's abilities; when in fact your own abilities in grammar and syntax are not the greatest. As I said, I did enjoy your poem but the lack of any punctuation made this particularly difficult to read.
Lack of punctuation? ha well I could honestly care less what a ignorant person like you thinks I think your just trying to Google words like syntax to make yourself sound intelligent you ARE insulting I CAN read very clearly what you find disguisting Is your own insecurities so Im gonna say this in better terms so you can understand in your "syntax"LMAO Lorna caizley your not a real writer you just think it makes you look better insulting people in your own words? You actually expect people to give a damn what you think? In the words of Samuel L.Jackson BITCH please
Keep hating on something better than you cause it puts a big smile on my face
I think you'll find that my comments on anyone else's work is that of only positivity. Your behaviour towards others is aggressive and uncouth. I did not 'hate' on your poetry, nor have I ever considered myself a writer, only someone who is learning this art form...As for ignorance, please take a long look in the mirror as I don't think you will like what you see.
Your right I don't like your Ignorance !bye thanks for hating I needed the laugh
Thank you for your private message Angela, I will not speak to you privately if your going to send me abusive messages. You obviously have some deep rooted problems. You can't can't bear to be ignored...this will be my final message to you...I have to say it hasn't been a pleasure. I wish you no ill will...but take bullying and abusive behaviour elsewhere
Well if I'm gonna tell you something I'm gonna be direct
yes thanks for this private message Angela... At least have the balls to critique my work on my page....not in slagging session Via private message.
I too am shocked by your comments Angela! Linda took the time to read and comment on your poem, expressing her enjoyment of it, and her personal opinion of suicide, not your poem!! This is a site where poets/writers share work, discuss subijection matter and meanings, praise, AND offer constructive criticism. If you don't understand this, perhaps this is not the right place for you to showcase your work. However, you will struggle to find a site with such talented and friendly members.
She shouldn't have insulted me if you can't Say something nice don't say anything period
My finame comment to you is to reiterate the FACT that Linda DID NOT insult you! She complimented your work and merely expressed here opinion that suicide is not a gift but an unfinished end or waste, of which, I couldn't agree more. YOU were insulting only, with continued arrogance and aggression, of which there is no place for here.
good luck.
Fuck your fiance and fuck you John coggins no she was ignorant as to what my poem was about you have no control over whether I can or can't write poetry on here so you can both go to hell freedom of speech
Finame= typo, *final.
An this is poem so fuck alllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllllooooooolooooooooooooooooooooo of you!