The Broken Angel (inspired by the last Edgar Allen poem I read…)
Once I was taken to the deep end of demonic despair
Till an angel took me high above this earth’s hemisphere
Speaking in whispers, as we floated weightlessly in space
She fed me the sweetest words my mind could ever taste
Taught me how to laugh again, and to rise above the din
while I told her all my secrets; for so long I’d kept hidden
And like every mortal man who carries feelings in his breast
The possibility of ‘love’ with us, this to her, I did address
But deep within her eyes, I could only see confusion
I was afraid that I had stepped on some forbidden ground
Till she smiled and turned around, showing me her broken wing
and said, I would be the first to know, if ever she got whole again
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Excellent write
thank you very much, Lorris, least I could do after reading your superb ink
Such a beautifully written piece, often the most tragic souls are drawn together it can create such a special kind of bond. I really enjoyed this :)
wow, thank you so much for saying those things, L Caizley, I'm touched, not 'humbled' no poet can ever be 'humble' at heart, else they would never post a single line; I could be totally wrong with that, lol....I'm honored you enjoyed, your work is amazing, cheers
thanks Christopher, I really did enjoy this a lot, pinned it :) x
This is so beautiful. The longing is potent and the heart is voiced.
The ending wrapped this masterpiece up perfectly.
Lovely ink.
wow, SoulWhispers (love your handle; kind of mysterious as well, liking that) what can I say? when you're good you're good! lol, for some reason you make me nervous, just saying... thanks for the great review, cheers poet
Hi Christopher I love your poem
two broken souls coming together
with maybe a possibility that love
could flourish once they healed
from passed hurt (just my thoughts )
Enjoyed a pleasure to read
Warmest wishes Debs
thanks, Deborah, great thoughts...I really appreciate you taking the time to comment, so glad you enjoyed, my friend.
Beautiful Christopher, Poe would be proud
Amber!! cheers!
Penned beautifully!!
How can two broken souls and unhinged come together? Why not? it takes time!!!!
I really enjoyed reading this!!
thanks for saying all that, Leah...Why not? So satisfied you enjoyed, means a lot, cheers
I really enjoyed reading this i thought is was an amazing poem I could feel the emotions from it and If I do say so myself you are a very talented person/poet. Thank you for sharing such an amazing poem.
Michele, thank you for your gracious compliment, so glad you enjoyed I'm honored by your words
My Brother Poet Chris,
My sweet love Annabelle Lee
Proffer thy broken wing, that I may it fix
You have turned my bitter heart, into a love filled cavern
You've opened up my soul, to again feel love
Allow me to minister your puerile pain
Then together, shall we fly away to infinity
Peace and Love,
Larry xxx
Larry, loving your poetic commentary my friend, thank you for the inspiration and encouragement brother poet
Chris I see this as a hopeful optimistic piece of writing in a time of distress we need angels
poised beautifully like the mermaid on the rock
or a birth of a child - God bless Jai:)
thanks Jai, I do like 'angels' - God bless you my friend
Thanks for your reply to Sweet Sylph.
I just caught The Broken Angel poem.
Poetry falls from the sky on a quiet night like this.
Anyone can catch it in their hair, if they leave
their imagination open.
Thank you, John, great comment, and yes, I do believe that as well, have great day, poet
You are right..we are all broken in one way or another. As always Sir Chris...you are still rocking out the words...xo
Tracey
hey, Tracey Sivek is in the house. Yes, I'm still here 'rocking out the words' I don't post much but I read a lot and comment, here and there...thank you for your kind words, cheers poet
OK this one is my fav! Love it!
thanks Amanda, I really like this one myself, so I'm pleased you liked, peace
Beautiful, professionally written. Inspirational, look forward to reading more of your work.
wow mark, thanks for your gracious comment that is high praise indeed, it means a lot to hear that, cheers poet
I like it. It's something I could never write. Very well written
thanks for the awesome comment, Waynehead, and before I wrote this one I never thought I could write it either, I never want to write the same thing twice, takes all the fun out of it, glad you read and liked this it means a lot, cheers poet
glad you liked, Waynehead, thanks....before I wrote this I never would've believed that I could write it either....this one brings to my mind the old Kris Kristopherson song line...'... a contradiction... partly fact, partly fiction'...poetry can be like a form of 'magic' and I never want to know all its' secrets, thanks again for the awesome comment
This write has touched the very essence of my soul, beautiful and sublime ! You are wonderful!
I'm truly honored by your words, Klaudia, I really am, thanks for saying that....so glad you connected to the poem, cheers
This is wonderful. I really enjoyed reading it!
it means a lot to me that you liked and commented as well, thanks a million, lovesickcandy
I have come back to this twice and can't quite come up with an adequate praise for this beautiful ink. all I can say is lovely, just plain lovely
lol, thanks Lisa, you make me smile today, hugs