Poem - 16 February 2018, 09:08

The Dog And The Crocodile

If a dog and a crocodile were friends,
Would they live in harmony or pretend?
That one was a dog and the other, A lost brother,
A myriad of teeth with a shoe like skin.
Found in the province of old haunted Skyrim.

I once dreamt that both were pets.
Go for walks, in sunlit wooded flats,
Then off down the road, to A rusty old Inn.
Where A hawked noised landlord said, no dags,
but the Croc is warming and welcome within.

We drank to the south and nodded to the north,
Beer flowed like old Saxon mead, from dew to vessel
Whilst the dog, shivering outside, wanting in.
To warm by life's fire, lost time for all to see.
So pity the pup that's cold, and hail the croc that's bold.

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ℙ𝕆𝔼𝕋𝔼𝕊𝕊𝔻𝔸ℝ𝕂𝕃𝕐16 February 2018, 10:03

"A hawked noised landlord said, no dags,"
I like the concept of the write, this paragraph just needs a little tweaking.
"A hawked nose landlord said, no dogs." just a suggestion. I'm by far not an expert.

ℙ𝕆𝔼𝕋𝔼𝕊𝕊𝔻𝔸ℝ𝕂𝕃𝕐16 February 2018, 10:05

and by the way, Welcome to cosmofunnel

Andy Wright16 February 2018, 10:12

Thanks, Poetessdarkly for the welcome and liking my piece of poetry. I'm new to this site but not new to writing poetry, though I've not written in a few years. I'm a very old friend of Terry Terri Zo. I take it I can post edit poetry I publish on the site?

ℙ𝕆𝔼𝕋𝔼𝕊𝕊𝔻𝔸ℝ𝕂𝕃𝕐16 February 2018, 11:57

yes, you can. if you're wondering how to edit your work, you go to the poem page and near the top is the edit button. change what you want and save at the bottom. :)

Andy Wright16 February 2018, 13:55

Thanks for the information on how to edit on this site Poetessdarkly :)

virginia jarrell16 February 2018, 10:46

Enjoyed reading more of your poetry, I like this one as although its your thoughts its open to many interpretations of the reader also. Love the mixture of provoking questions,' would they live in harmony or pretend? statements and bold descriptive lines, 'We drank to the south and nodded to the north','Beer flowed like old Saxon mead, from dew to vessel', love that imagery.
Look forward to reading more of your work.

Andy Wright16 February 2018, 13:54

Thanks Virginia for liking this piece of poetry of mine. I will publish and write more. Yeah, imagery is an important aspect of any piece of poetry.