Poem -
The Lotus
Is it time to let the lotus fly?
Unravelling from an initial bloom,
it will cascade through air,
as petals shed and smile
in shared memories of love.
Childhood dreams saw my
weddingย dress made of petals-ย
counting each recollection with knotsย
wrapped inย an embedded future, that leaves me slowly now.
The whispering bloom is fading
in sunken hues of white and pink,
as the falling silence entraps my body
in a solace of luxurious loss.
I left our lotus on the kitchen sillย
the hues shone in the sun
but time in its passing
has left it to rot,
filling the house with an empty sensation.
Because it's time to let the lotus go.ย
It's time to let the lotus flyย
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WOW!!... what a brilliant write!!..... from the opening line leading us through the life of the fading petals... with the beautifully coupled metaphor of the wedding dress & the love-loss...... taking us to the answer in the final line..... an excellent piece of poetic craftsmanship!!......ALL STARS!!...... well done dear poet!!.... and......WELCOME to COSMO!!......LOVE & ROCKETS!!......T xo
Thank you my dear, what great feedback. I sincerely appreciate it! <3
You're absolutely astonishing! I love your work. :)
Check out some of mine some time, I think you'll appreciate it. We write with similar styles.
Thank you dear poet, I will be sure to have a look ?
WINNER ---- beautiful beautiful beautifulย --
echo
beautiful beautiful beautiful
stirs the soul and gives visions x
thanksย
i think it should win
Thank you for the wonderful feedback, it would be an honour to win the competition.ย
With love x
As a lover of haiku and a published contemporary haiku poet, I feel the lovely lotus flower screams beauty matched only by its very simplicity.
You've done the lotus quite proud in this elegant and beautifully written poem, The Lotus author
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~Dean Kuch
Thank you Dean, the lotus in this poem serves as anย extendedย metaphor for a gentle dying love. Of my collections during the time this was written, this poem seems to tie up my experience the most.ย
Thank you dearย poet,ย
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-Leahย
The pleasure was entirely mine, Leah.
You're more than welcome.
~Deanย ?
To all those that have stopped by- thank you ever so much for your comments, likes and upvotes. I am crossing my fingers- it would be such an honour to win! xx