Understand me!
Heckle the hell out of me.
Settle the score constantly.
Forget to respect the arduous concept.
That I remember it vividly.
When you were still here.
But I know.
Itβs not about the words upon the paper.
All I know is thatβ¦.
Iβm stuck within this rhyme,
At my own demise.
Iβve comprised a shelter into a prison,
Though Iβve committed - Not a crime.
And Iβm stuck within this feeling that I hide,
At the dotted line.
A non-negotiable portion of this
Subprime baggage.
And Iβm like,
I didnβt want to pull this carriage but Iβve managed as a horse.
Spent hours after hours hauling others and of course.
You can imagine how Iβve established subtle self-control.
But Iβm an addict and itβs a habit.
So I purchased, then I stole.
And Iβve changed.
And Iβve changed.
And Iβve change for the greater good.
Now no one can say to me again.
That Iβm not well understood.
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Comments
Oh Max, Just keep going with a good heart and intention. Yes I can certainly understand, some times, some comments can be mis-understood here and elsewhere. Never mind. Best wishes. Yiyan
Thanks Yiyan!!! I think sometimes we all can be misunderstood. And yet in reaffirmation do we find who we truly are and who we truly want to be. Best wishes also! Thanks for the comment mate.
Very very deep and self searching Max...really enjoyed reading this work x
Searching indeed~ I enjoyed writing this one. Thanks for your kind comment as always Marion. Means a lot to me!
Your words and phrasing is well understood in this wonderful write. well done
I feel like I've found my edge again. Least for this one... I know I can be dull sometimes. Thanks for the read Lisa!
Max I don't find your writing at all dull. You always get me thinking and your work inspires me to write
That means a lot Lisa~ More than you know. I hope your inspiration lasts longer than mine! Always love your comments
"Iβm stuck within this rhyme,
At my own demise.
Iβve comprised a shelter into a prison,
Though Iβve committed - Not a crime."
I loved this what a ride!
Haha glad you liked it CO. It's been a while mate, how have you been? Will catchup on yours first. Hope you are well my friend!
I see that I'm not the only one glad that you got your mojo back .. full of metaphor and impeccable poetic imagery .. the Fish has done good again and then some ... NevilleΒ
Thanks Neville. It takes time for everyone - longer for some. I'm glad you enjoyed this one mate, your comment means a lot.
Hey Max...looks like I've a lot to catch up on.
This is deeply soul searching. Vrry personal. Very real. Awesome work. You clearly have poetic talent x
Thanks Tina! That didn't mean you had to read them all XD. But I'm super glad you did, I really love reading your comments~ They always brighten my day. I seem to do a LOT of soul searching on here, not sure if I find any though. Perhaps that part is up to the reader... either way, thanks for the kind comment my friend~