Unlike Me Part 1
Awareness? A cure or unfairness?
It`s a challenge to understand.
When just so difficult to breathe.
Outlandish? I can`t stand this.
When everyone`s treading water,
The sharks are lurking at their feet.
Pulled between the past and the future,
The lies and the truths and the retracted demands.
Our environment, our people, shouldn’t tell us - distract us.
From whom we really are – or really am.
From whom we want to be.
Bullies and baddies and unholy tragedies.
Commercial calamities, I can`t believe,
The factualised fantasies, - If we play the blame game
With an eye for an eye, how can we see?
Unlike me.
Unlike me.
Unlike, me.
Never them,
Never us
Never We.
In the whisk of a nightmare
Where no one dares wake.
Broken mistakes and bursting torn seams.
No one cares – short term pleasure and pain,
How can they see?
Unlike me
Unlike me.
Begging and shaking.
Pleading and praying…
Please
Be
Unlike me.
Unlike, me.
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Sometimes we look at the world around us...really look and wonder WTF this is all about...then mostly we just have a little cry and get on with being the world...Good write my friend x
Thanks so much my kind friend, your comment Marion makes me feel less alone. Really, with out your support I doubt I'd be much of a poet at all. Means so much to me~
Don't be daft...of course you are. Trouble with you is you think too much about how to be a good poet( no such thing )...just as there isn't any one supreme flavour of ice cream. We all have different tastes. Stop thinking...look at an image ...and just write how you feel. Picture promts are brilliant for this. You write excellently my friend, don't let your perceived ideas of what you should be stop you from being just as you are...hugs X
Thanks, Marion, I agree that tends to be my problem. XD, I just want to be the best I can be, and showcase my best talent... I know, it's a lame excuse. We should be happy and accepting of who we are. I think I`ll take your advice on that technique, Marion, I feel like it will be a meditative experience. Again that you for all the support you have shown me over the last God knows how long. Your words motivate me, in more ways than I could state. I hope you are well my friend, sincerely, Max
On a different site...pop...Jill is now moderator there, they have weekly competitions. A picture prompt...so they will post an image and you have to write about it. It is very popular, very therapeutic...to me anyway. It takes me away from the never ending dire thoughts in my head and forces me to change direction. I engage with it periodically when I'm up to it. Try it. It's a nice site...message Jill for details how to join. Quite a few of us are in there...BM, Greg, Jill, Sarfraz, Pratihba...x
Hi Marion! Thank you for letting me know that sounds like a lot of fun. I have uni exams up soon, but I`ll be sure to check that out afterwards. Sounds Awesome~ Thanks again my kind friend, catch up soon! Sincerely, Max
A fine write indeed Sir Max .. N :)
Thanks so much Neville!!
Max how are you and thanks for writing from the left bank of one's soul.
You are unique and so damned original in your train of thought and approach when writing.
Real standalone themes which are always new and refreshing to view.
For you project everything equally effortlessly and eloquently and always an engaging and thinking poet's read.
Thanks Max and I respectfully tip my poetry hat to you my friend and I hope all is well with you.
And remain the true person and poet you are.
Your friend, Shaun.
Thanks Shaun!! It means a hell of a lot for you to comment and support me. Really, I saw a bunch this morning and thought "must be Shaun!" XD. I`m really chuffed that you enjoy my take on poetry, the hardest bit is keeping my work original!! That`s why I use parts to link similar poems. Your words left me smiling Shaun, once again, thank you so much~
Sheer Stella write Max ❤️❤️❤️
Thank you, Jill!! I`m so glad you enjoyed it~
💕❤️💕
awesome write my unique fluid friend!.....................................................Jim
XD, it came out easier than most, thank you so much Jim! Hope to catch up soon my friend!
Hi Max,
I enjoyed reading this. Right from the first lines. Because being aware, can feel overwhelming when we look on from behind the scenes so to speak. Watching the chaos. This society wants to be blameless yet at the same time we stick our heads in the sand rather than fix things and make a better difference, so the downhill carnage continues. We poets are very intuitive and observant. We can't ignore things. So it eats away at us as we muse. I sensed that in this write. Life eating away at you as you push and pursue to do what is right. How we recognise the weight on our shoulders, who would want that? But we have it. I loved the
"Please
Be
Unlike me"
We can feel out of place in this life when we feel and see too much
I really loved this piece Max, you always speak so raw and yet you do it in creative ways. Brilliant structure here, great job 👏
Gwen x
Hi Gwen, thanks so much! Yeah, it's weird, sometimes I feel as if everyone's walking with a bag on their heads. Sometimes, I reckon that people give up or simply believe that they can`t make a difference in the world, where they can, everyone can. One day, I think I`ll try to share that, maybe make a difference myself. Life is eating me away... but poetry at least compart-mentalises my thoughts, in its own way. You made me smile with your kind and awesome words. I hope to catch up soon and hope is all well with you on your side of the thicket fence~ Sincerely, your friend Max
You know Max, you made me think of a poem I wrote when I was about 16. Called "Headless Chickens" I have it somewhere. I must dig it out. That's the second time this week it has popped in my head. Obviously it's about us humans running around like headless Chickens, seemingly clueless 🙄
Thanks for the smiles 🙃
Dig it out, Gwen!! I`d love to see it!!
Max I was in the your neighbourhood with good intentions and chose to visit a touch of class.
And glad I did mate.
Simply sublime writing.
XD Thanks so much Shaun! I can agree, sometimes writes only get better with a second viewing~ Peace to you my kind friend.