Poem -
where is the world?
there is a world I cannot see
when she lies sleeping next to me
beneath the weight of sad dreams
seems to rage a battle;
as if she is fighting off the fury
of some cruel foe
happily, I would become an ally
in the heat of the fray
a light in the darkness
that shines her way
between the earth and sky
reality and a dream
I would so quickly fly
I would go,
just to be a feather or a shadow
that tilts the outcome of this battle
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like the poem especially the last line so cool linda
Hi Christopher I found this poem sad I am not sure the
interpretation, firstly i thought maybe of someone in a coma trying to find their
way back to reality to wake up, secondly i thought maybe someone
with maybe dementia locked in a world of their own battling to to remain in the here
and now. It may well be none of them. also in both of my interpretations
i thought of someone in turmoil feeling useless they cant help this person
I found it a sad yet beautiful poem
For me a Great piece
Best wishes Debs
Hello Christopher, your write along with the picture made me remember and long for online role play when it used to be in the old format, I'm talking ten or more years ago. It was a fantasy world where we did a D&D thing, each person playing a different role and building off of each others posts. It was so much fun. I know the feelings expressed here are universal. When my friend was sick this past year I would have done anything to keep him from passing, would have taken the illness into myself if I could have... and that helplessness is so hard. You expressed that so well with your words. I truly enjoyed your ink. :) Hugs and blessings friend, Rebecca
hey, Rebecca,
that sounds like fun; online role play, not sure how that would work but intrigued.... really sorry to hear about your friend, so sad....I wrote this poem about five years ago, and recently found it in my files, it's actually a very personal write, at the time it was very painful, not so much now, to be honest, it's about alienation mostly, but I draw a line when it comes to very personal things having to be explained in poetry, especially from the past, yes you're right, certain feelings are universal....I'm glad I posted this one though, the feedback has really opened my eyes, thanks for comment, cheers
Wow! loved this Chris, your work just gets better and better. a compassionate write my friend. keep them coming.
cheers jeff
thanks Jeff,
this write is perhaps the oldest one I've ever written and posted on here, thanks for reading and commenting as well, cheers my friend
My Brother Poet Chris,
He's got the whole world in his hands! Who? Mankind. Stop mishandling her. Stop raping her. Stop the genocide of her precious children. Wake up, rise up. Call an end to the slaughter of the innocents and a beginning to the murder of those that don't heed the proclamation.
Peace and Love,
xox Larry
hey, Brother Poet Larry,
wow! you got all that from this poem? mercy! I don't if I should feel flattered or scared, lol,
peace and love to you as well, partner
thanks for taking the time to make a comment
Oh Chris how could I have missed this?? this is amazing!
I like this one! Christopher, it's just me and boy am I different or what? LOL I read your poem and had got a totally different vision on it than anyone here!!!!! I felt it is about romance, and his desire and need to be comforted......accepted. I'm always the odd one out in a crowd......I should be used to this by now LOL....but still it amazes me every time.....here is what I got from the poem........my mind saw a woman this man longs for and yet she only lies with him in his fantasy, perhaps they had communicated before. He is the one in sadness and she is comforting to him somehow. He would love to have just the chance or opportunity to speak to her be in her life, even for one night Just to be with her and lightly caress her, in her room....outcome tilted...For reality would be the result!...............................I know, I know......a romantic at heart! LOL Anyway, that is what I envisioned as I read!!!! Great poem! Liked the pic too.....she is strong enough to comfort him, yet feminine enough to please him! Nicely done!
wow, Paula, what a great comment, I like what you saw, lol....the poem was written over 15 years ago, and edited a few times, lol...the poem is very personal, hidden in a metaphor, at this point I started writing poetry as an attempt to sort out certain struggles in my life, fighting personal 'demons' I guess you could say, and I know how abstract that sounds, lol....I paint oil on canvas and reason things out in images....no, Paula, I'm happy that the poem opened up your viewpoint, not strange at all, love that actually....thanks again for the comment, enjoyed