Poem -
Winter Blues
How might I sway the day
to share a bit of sun?
How might the grey
be washed away
and sleeping birds
be coaxed to chirp?
Let winters bite begone
For these mornings
feel like hollow lungs
beneath a placid sky
The beads of winters breath lay strung
In muted tongue
the air is wrung
Each day put out to die
Tell me how might I pull back the sun
From falling from the sky?
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Comments
wonderful poem
i dont think many people
like winter they put up with it
but there are some who
do like winter it isnt me
i hate it
Greg I am with you..the gloom and short days of light bring my mood right down. Thank you for your wonderful words my friend x
You are so welcome I’ve known people who don’t like sunshine they black out the windows in there house And I love sunshine
Give me sunshine pleeeeease ☀️😎I am with you my friend x
'Each day put out to die'...wow Gwen...what a line!! Perfectly describes winter...though I love winter, probably because I'm a bleak person...love this...hugs xx
Thank you my friend. I think that is my favourite line in the whole piece. So glad you enjoyed. I just become a bigger grump I think. Hugs xx
AMAZING phrasing here dear poet sister....and then the formatting used to accent some of those phrases.....this is an absolute measure of what it means to be a STELLAR writer.....as opposed to being an average writer.....the wielding of words to their absolute heights.....in this case....conveying the bleakness of what it means to deal with depression.....ALL STARS & PINNED!!......Bravo GWENDOLINE!!....truly impressive work!!......LOVE & ROCKETS!!......T xo : )
Blimey Tony, your words are always so encouraging and I don’t necessarily feel so worthy of such feedback. But wow do you put a smile on my face with such kind and generous commentary. I am so grateful you read my work and leave me your thoughts. They are always such a highlight to read. Thank you for being your awesome self and for being my friend
Gwen x
So lovely.
Almost missed your lovely words Liliana, apologies and thank you for reading and leaving your kind comment x
Near made me shiver so ya did
and parts of me turn blue ..
Can't wait until the springtime comes
with luv from me to you .. x
Very much enjoyed throughout with some bloomin brill bits scattered here n there ... inc those copied n pasted below
"For these mornings
feel like hollow lungs
beneath a placid sky"
"Each day put out to die"
"Tell me how might I pull back the sun
From falling from the sky?
:)
What bloomin lovely words to leave
etched here onto my page
May spring soon knock upon your door
To brighten up your days 🌻
Thanks so much for the luv and well wishes my friend. Please find them returned in the hope you shall also get some sunshine delivered ☀️
So glad you enjoyed this gloomy girls write. I find winter seems to make the loneliness hang heavier for some reason
Thanks for your kind words
Gwen 😊 x
I read this as a blizzard howls outside my window. Great write!
Wow JP I do hope the weather has calmed down for you. Many thanks for reading and leaving your kind words x
Gwen beautiful and beguiling writing, you had me hooked on your two opening lines and everything else just seems to flow so smoothly and effortlessly like a natural poetry progression.
And this reader caught up in your poem and feels all the better from doing so.
A seamless poem, a gliding on silk poem and a feel good about oneself after reading.
Pure poetry satisfaction.
Beautifully done. x.
Shaun...your words are always so attentive and kind my friend. I am truly grateful to have you visit my page and leave me your wonderful thoughts. You lift the spirits of every poet with your enthusiasm and support. Never stop being your wonderful thoughtful self. So good to see you actively on Cosmo 😊 x
Damn good write Gwen
Wow thanks so much for looking back at my work and leaving me such a lovely comment :) x