Within The Shell
Standing in the ocean, soft waves brush past my legs.
The autumn chill is felt now as the suns watery rays fade.
Between my toes the sand slips and slides leaving me unsteady...
As in life
On the horizon dark shapes form, blotting a clear skyline.
Is the earth flat or is there a curve? Hard to say,
but what I hoped for was to see far into infinity ..uninterrupted...
As in life
A deserted beach bleak and savage,
seemingly devoid of life but teeming with unseen beauty.
All wonders from the deep now on the surface but hidden...
As in life
As in death the sea relentlessly meets the shore
and retreats at its own will,
turning the tide to ebb and flow...
Commanding all
As in death the surface hides the unknown
beneath which a tempest rages and squalls form.
The whirlpool draws all into its hypnotic dance...
And takes away and subjugates.
As in death I feel the cold penetrate my body
rendering a blessed numbness.
Fish explore the sand beneath my feet ,unearthing the shell
trembling hands open it to reveal the sought for mystery of life...
A lustrous pearl.
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STUNNINGLY HANDSOME in conception to delivery...... the repetition of the line ~ "As in life .." sets this poem up (from the outset) for greatness...... it speaks to the mysteries of life & death with such amazing 'eloquence of forethought' that by poems end the reader already knows what to expect.....THAT is the undeniable 'Mark Of Excellence' that MOST writers aspire to !!.....you have crossed the threshold with stellar marks and 'Flying Colors' dear poet sister..... by far ~ the best LODIGIANA poem that I've read!!.... that is NOT to say there are no others for most assuredly I have not read all of your work!!..... suffice it to say ......PINNED!!.....this is friggin' BRILLIANT!! Bravo!! your cyber-friend and admirer!!...T xo ✴?????✴ ?
Dear brother Poet, what can I say? I am floored by your comments and totally amazed! thank you so much and it is never an exaggeration to say how appreciative I am to read your words - thank you so much ! xxx
Lodigiana
I am with Tony on this. You expressed yourself so well. You are Brilliant!!!
Dear Greg, your comments are so so generous and I am honoured to receive them- thank you most sincerely! xxx
Lodigiana
you captured such a reflective, placid tone, lodigiana, brilliant narrative, and I love your syntax, you certainly suspended disbelief as the reader walked with you and felt the weight of your deep thoughts, this is a great poem to dive into on this cold November evening, enjoyed, poetess, cheers
'The autumn chill is felt now as the suns watery rays fade.
Between my toes the sand slips and slides leaving me unsteady...'
Hi Christopher, I keep re reading your comments and smiling broadly, even if a little self consciously...Thank you so very much and I am thrilled that you enjoyed it- keep warm this chilly November my friend!! xxx
Lodigiana
One of the best poems I have read here!
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Dear Keith, what a lovely thing to say!! Thank you so very much, I am astounded but so happy that you enjoyed it! Xxx
Lodigiana