A Light Cut Short
Collab with Robert Grove
Those crimson tides
rise
Like fireworks in
July
Whose sharp sparks
Outshine the stars
Then
swiftly
fade
to
die
As they fall from
the nights sky
All eyes are
brought to
life...
Except yours
Perpetually jaded
Forced to dwell
in remorse
Regretful threats
stored
Saved for
what ?
God only
knows
Loved ones
ignored
Only emptiness
Grows...
Blows,
like a deathly breeze
chills the soul
Those crimson tides
fall
Like fireworks in
July
Whose sharp sparks
Outshine the stars
Then
swiftly
fade
to
die
You too
once shined
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Comments
Thank you Rob for making this happen. It was such fun to do, you are a fab writer to work with :) x
Your very welcome, it was a ton of fun and you brought it all together with a perfect title. It all started with : "Those crimson tides
rise" ...... We even pulled it off within the allowed limit for messages lol.
:) ~Rob
Lol we did, although am out of messages now so had to reply to your last via email. Thanks for this today Rob, it was a lot of fun 😊
wow what poem
i like the way you
did
this
see
i
can
do
it
to
Thanks my friend :) yes I felt it gave the feeling of that fading firework. So glad you liked this collaboration x
stunning in its stark fragility .. and very brave too ..
I daren't even contemplate a collab but admire anyone who takes part in one ............. x
Many thanks for stopping by my friend. It was fun to do. I would definitely encourage more people to dip their toe into collaborations 🙃 Thanks for the pin. I think it turned out quite beautiful x
This is one perfect collab. If it was written by just one poet it would be brilliant but it was written by two! How you both pulled this off to such a mega, mega high standard I will never know. Very well done both of you. This poem states, explores and wraps around (I know what I mean) basically, it is just bloody perfect. Well done the pair of you. I absolutely love this! ❤ Xx
Tina Wow this is such a wonderful response :) Thank you for taking the time to read and comment. Rob and I enjoyed writing this, it came together very easily, we just gelled well with our writing. It was a fun learning curve for me and I was so grateful Rob asked me to take part. Means so much to read such fab feedback. Thanks a ton xx
I agree with most everything everyone has said here......to create and sustain the fragility and that poetic sense of falling that is being conveyed here is most difficult ....but for two pens to accomplish what you have here is bloody brilliant.....I think Tina said it best ~ "I absolutely Love this!"......Bravo you two.....well done!!......LOVE & ROCKETS!!.....T xo : )
Tony, I am so glad you could feel the sense of falling and the fragility of the piece as a whole. We were so pleased with the outcome. We had no clue where our words would take us, so it was fun watching the subject form. So grateful you took the time to look back and leave your fab words on this here poem
Many many thanks my friend
Gwen x
cool write you two!......................................................................Jim
Thanks so very much Jim. This was such a fun thing to do. I was so grateful Rob asked me to take part :) so pleased you enjoyed
Gwen x
Wow Gwen and Rob! I love this! It's a brilliant collab write! Love the structure and reads so well as one poem in unity. Pinned! Magnificent piece! Px 💜💜💜😁
Yay P thanks so much. It was a fun write and we did it quite quickly too 🙃 Thanks for taking the time to check it out my friend 💗 xx
💜💕💜 of course! Px
so fun. you two are amazing.
Hi Mark, good to see you on here. Fun is a good word for this. We had a lot of fun working on this particular collab. Thanks for stopping by and reading it for us and thanks for liking my other poem too. So grateful for the reads. Will check your page today x