An eye for and eye
Lying there amidst the sand,
She is on the precipice.
In searching for the strength to stand,
She finds everything remiss.
To us this place is paradise,
To her a broadway stage.
She's very bad at thinking twice,
And it's getting worse with age.
She has the prop to steal the show,
The sea a sedative.
Finding courage takes its toll,
When it's getting hard to live.
She placed herself on broken shell,
To justify her thoughts.
On the horizon is a welcome hell,
The ticket she can well afford.
Gulls bear down upon her head,
Reminding her of wrongs.
Martyred by one human, dead,
Only wind to hear her songs.
And so she asks of all that's fair,
'Is this the thing to do?'
Is it right to go on living when she took your life from you?
She suffered through the lonely years,
Target in all but name.
You loathed to mop up salty tears,
But you hit her all the same.
It wasn't hard to take your life,
After all you put her through.
She was mistress of that bloodied knife when she plunged it into you.
'An eye for an eye' is what she said,
And the circles come full swing.
So rising at the rainbows end,
She surrenders everything.
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Brilliant write. Rage built to a very dark crescendo
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Wow!!.... Congrats on the nod from administration SAMANTHA!!..... this piece deserves it ......I agree with LOST's assessment here..... rage seething & searing its way to the boiling point...." Mistress of the bloodied knife.." ~ VERY CREATIVE!!..... well conceived and delivered with some unique phrasing!!.....ALL STARS!!.... LOVE and ROCKETS!!......T xo ?✳✴☀
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Gosh she seems so innocent for a murderer.. though the show must go on.
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This piece was phenomenal. It was dark and twisty but it was a perfect picture playing in my head. Very well done.
Wow! Thanks so much for your lovely comment Mackenzie! ❤️
As if I was watching a drama movie ## it reminds me of the " murder she wrote ", one of my favorites, ###well crafted and the words used are perfect ## great ink and a well deserved nomination..
leah
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she was "very bad at thinking twice." Sounds like an impulsive person....something that gets me in trouble. When I feel the urge, that is my signal to keep my mouth shut or to wait before acting....
Haha same here James. Thanks for reading!!
I love this! So dark yet beautiful in its own way. 5 stars *****
Thanks so much - I'm pleased you enjoyed it! xx
This reads so fluently and really pulls you in to the story. I like how it's a bit different too.
Hey! I'm so glad you enjoyed it! Thanks so much!! ?