Don`t trip
Stair’s stare,
Patience strained.
People framed…
And a heart that is bare.
Working winds,
Historic names,
Triggering memories.
Of thoughts – The trains.
Now they walk the hall,
Like ghosts, like you`re a ghost.
Oh, please don’t boast!
Born of fire,
That’s more than most,
Lifting higher faster.
I`m nailed to the post.
And at all costs
The beach or the coast?
Dry up or soak in?
Rather walk the miles,
Then drown or swim.
Then play the game,
A social standard,
That`s nothing for me,
I really can`t stand it.
I just want to
Look into space
Without looking away.
Hiding from scavengers’ eyes
Targets locked for the pain.
Heat-seeking, bloodthirsty
Wanting one or another…
A duck of a plover?
Walk
Don’t trip
Never hit.
And always miss.
The Fish of the Sea.
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Wow!! This is intense FISH!!....for me it was like a man's questioning and doubts about ALL that he faces....his patience being tried......and most certainly being strenuously ripped apart....torn between two potential options......this or that....and neither being ideal......swimming through life and avoiding the pitfalls......All of this doesn't make sense I'm sure....but it's what I got from your words......it felt VERY stress-filled.....like the trials and tribulations of living HARD!!......sorry I couldn't be more specific.....I couldn't quite nail it down!!.......hope I'm on the right track here....but hey ~ It's poetry.....and personal interpretation is everything!!.......ALL STARS!!.....thanx for this MAX......truly compelling stuff dear poet brother!!.....LOVE & ROCKETS!!.......T xo : )
Nice to see you back Tony!! Thanks so much for your kind comment. It took me ages to get the flow right on this one, but that's always a complaint eh? ;) XD, I think you hit the nail on the head Tony, I know my messages aren't always clear, and they're not supposed to be~ Glad you got some emotions out of my write. That's all I was hoping for~ Smiles and calm waters to you. Your friend FISH~
Hello Max :)Â
I felt the strain of not fitting in with social apparent norms in this fab write. Wresting with choices that neither bring you comfort nor you identify with. Society is rigid, we can feel forced to mould ourselves so we can be accepted. But it doesn’t make us happy.
here I feel this longing to just be you. To not have to face those prying eyes, that only ever want to judge and cause grief. There is so much pain through this piece. It’s a truly heavy heart the reader is left withÂ
Wishing you well MaxÂ
your friend Gwen x
Wow, thanks so much, Gwen! Your generous words always mean so much to me. I think us poets can all relate to not fitting in through some context. To be honest, I think we shouldn't let ourselves be moulded in societies image and just be the people we want to be. Thank you for picking out that part of the write, yes... these eyes seem to never stop searching... wanting me to pay attention to them. These days I use measures like music to block them away. Thank you again, Gwen, your support lifts me up in my day. Peace to you my friend, I hope you are well~
Hi Max...what I got from this was a sense of frustration and bewilderment, probably on the wrong track but thoroughly enjoyed the write my friend...it has energy x
XD, Marion, you were the one that told me emotions are more powerful than words, and yes, that was exactly where I was going with this one!! It's all about the energy eh? ;) Peace to you my friend. Your support means so much to me
Holy shit Max ! Where did this come from ....... I’m sensing more from the heart than that marvelous mind of yours and it bleeds through the words ! If we were all the same this site would be boring , there’s no reason why we can’t celebrate our differences as that’s how we grow and learn from one another .
” variety is the spice of life “  I’m glad you are who you are Max because
The fish of the sea makes Cosmo more interesting, entertaining and with warmer waters . :)Â
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XD, writing from the heart~ Thanks so much, Rob! And agreed, though in Cosmo`s waters is where I feel most at home. Seems like these days, people just don't understand... I feel disconnected from others around us like they are on a different frequency... just seems so blasé. Thank you Rob, it's great that we all can share on Cosmos, our differences and our similarities. Glad you enjoyed it. The support it felt!
Impressively deep as always.
Great work.Â
XD, thanks Liliana, my inspiration, directly from you~
Wow Max! I love the string rhythm you have going through this. This write is powerful and conjures up emotions well. Awesome! x
Hi Tina! Thanks so much!! I wanted to do something similar to the Sandstrom series... Just needed the inspiration! Your support means so much my friend, I hope you are well. Max~
Max I luvit!!! So brilliant 💕❤️💕🌹
XD Thanks Jill!! Your kind words really lift me up~
Good morning Max and like the previous poem I commented on , Just WoW ! I envy anyone who can write over 3 verses and this 1 strong piece of work keeping me gripped throughout , You evoke great imagery and have written a beautiful bit of art ,Best wishes and very well done sir :)
Ahhh thanks Chris!! Really, it means a hell of a lot. This one took ages to craft and get right and it started its life as 2 separate trains of thought... Perhaps you can see the stitches? ;) I`m glad you find my work engaging, one of my goals a writer~ Smiles and peace to you my friend. Thank you for your feedback.