Farmers Fence
Jealousy be Dammed
Met someone on the other side of the fence, for the first time I was the third wheel. It got to be a bit, so I decided to write this as always to record my thoughts before they flew away. Also, a bit of jealousy so doesnât portray me as a person, just a note đ
Shotgun in someone else`s car?
Guess I`d want the same
But really inseparable, I find that a laugh
You don`t even know my name
Doors shut now the game starts
Picking  up every word you say
Using my instincts honed from years of scars
Always â itâs been my way
So a 47-minute ride turns into a lifetime of thought
Using conversation to find answers of sorts
Data collection with every word rising higher
Time to make some decisions â Let's ignite this fire
No knowledge of world events â not a clue
No understanding of history â says a lot about you
Social media addiction â 2nd class
Independence but no common sense â a typical yarn
Beep beep
Made up my time
Napoleon complex, a sign of disrespect
Laughing with confidence, chuckling with content
You know, I know
The grass is greener
From my side of the fence
The Fish of the Sea.
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Really enjoyed that 45 min ride! but I don't know what a typical yarn is? Is that boring?........ are you pigeon holing? lol! what was the name of the road you were on ? okay! really was nice to see the thought process going on ...your friend ...Jim
XD, yes a typical girl... 3rd wheeling is hard Jim, first time doing it in ages... jealous of that and this whole poem was to make me feel more confident about myself. Lol. Dont even know the road names! Best wishes, your friend Max
A statement of the fact - "You don`t even know my name" Ha ha ha - Just The fish of the sea ;)Â
Good piece on reality with a wonder mind.
Also quite literally as well Yiyan! But yes now that I think about it, it can work both ways... thanks so much for your comment. Jeep being awesome! TFOTSÂ
Really enjoyed the read Max as I loved the thought processes but I can't decide what it's actually about. No matter, most of mine only have meaning for me...lol...enjoyed đđ
Hi Marion, no problem, it's about third wheeling in a car, the poem is directed at the girl rather than the boy, as he is a good friend of mine, its a bit of a jealousy write because I'm making myself feel better than the girl because I'm lonely that my SO couldn't b there with me... Lol, I know my poetry can be cryptic too! Best wishes, your friend Max
Hi TFOTSÂ I think it is very brave sometimes to share those innermost thoughts that many of us learn to keep hidden. It's a much healthier attitude..although it doesn't necessarily help how the situation might have made you feel....except to acknowlege that the grass can sometimes be greener- your side! Good write my friend.
Lodigiana x
XD, yes thanks Lodigiana, very very true, I dont really have anyone to talk about that sort of thing so poetry is my out. It's always been so therapeutic! Thanks again for your kind comment, it really means so much, kind regards, your friend TFOTS or Max, your choice ;)
You are very welcome MaxÂ
Interesting write dear Max! For future reference, if the grass looks greener over the fence it's more than likely weeds and not grass at all x
Amen Tina! I just wish that I didnt have to compare myself to others all the time to feel better about myself... but I think that will come with age. Thanks though always love hearing from you, stay aawesome! Your friend, Max
Wow FISH!!....this is a VERY compelling Poetic Narrative you have delivered here.....and a fine job you have done with keeping us on the edge of our seats with the Stream Of Consciousness you so deftly crafted within.....It was truly a pleasure getting to know you by following along in your minds self-talk.....A VERY well conceived and BEAUTIFULLY delivered piece of poetic prose.....with a simultaneous piece of poetic verse woven through its entirety as well!!......ALL STARS!! & PINNED!!.....one of your best (in my humble opinion)........BRAVO!!........LOVE & ROCKETS!!....T xo : )
Thanks Tony! Wow, it feels like an honour for you to break down my work like that. Truly you have no clue how much it means to me. But yes it was really hard to get the balance write, I still think it's a little off, because I wanted to get my message across somewhat clearly but not revealing whilst also being engaging to the reader. I had many attempts and amendments before this one, but eventually I got it to work for me. Like you said bit of a mix of nonsense, hidden meaning and direct truth! I am stunned you think my work is beautiful. Thank you again so very much. Kind regards and peace to you Tony! Your friend, FISH