God Patiently Waits....
(Observations from a coffee shop window)
In the mounting tension of a bursting town,
Car parks filled with facial frown,
Weekend mayhem, crowds abound,
And an empty Church stands waiting.
People like mannequins aimlessly flow,
Scarcely time to say Hello!
Lavish gifts bought to bestow,
And a lonely Church lies waiting.
Purses bulge with funds galore,
From a packed Public House..a deafening roar,
Constant footsteps pass a wide open door,
Of a hopeful Church in waiting.
Thunderous traffic and babies cries,
Blaring horns no longer a surprise,
Amid this chaos a quiet place lies,
In a peaceful Church still waiting.
Worldly repentance may soon be too late,
In the queue up to Heaven there's a lengthy wait,
On bloodied knees at a bolted gate,
Down below... Lucifer is waiting.
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"Down below...Lucifer is waiting"
What a sweet, lovely, Christmassy sentiment to share with all your friends here on Cosmo.
Thanks Mick...you're a pal!!
Beautiful use of the subtly changing repetition...well, up until the point you punched us in the stomach! That was less fun!!
Excellent piece.
Maybe in the New Year you can write us a poem about getting paper cuts from calendars?? ;)
Nollaig Shona, a chara.
J.
Always great to hear your views Jason.....Thank you !
Nollaig ShonaΒ a thabhairt duit chomh maith.
Hey MIZZY!!......it's all in the delivery here....... it's built so perfectly ......timed so well....... and filled with loving phrasing..... that the reader can't wait for the closing lines....... to feel the call of the Church andΒ worldly repentance...........Β VERY well conceived...... and BEAUTIFULLY delivered!!........ALL STARS!!......... gorgeous write brother poet!!....... LOVE and ROCKETS!!.......T xo.Β ?
Many thanks for your great review Tony.....
Regards Mick.
Hi Β Mizzy Great write Β it flowed beautifullyΒ
The topicΒ superb the commercialism of Christmas
where the true meaning Β by some is forgottenΒ
Fantastic write!Β
Best wishes DebsΒ
You hit the nail straight on the head Deborah....exactly what I wanted to portray...we're brainwashed by the marketing giants of this modern society...
Many thanks....Mick.
Awesome pen Mick. just a note you misspelled "purses."
Thank you Lisa.......Appreciated !
Mick.