Poem -
How does one un see
With eyes of sand and hands in body parts.
They stretch out the tiredness.
Can't rape the willing or can you.
Eyes of grit, why does one do such shit.
A semi sort sore from the stretch of the imagination.
sand rash irritations, gravel eyes in these adult subjects.
Prolapse into internal objects what the minds eye can't un see.
There is no un see, there is no un do just undone.
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Wow!! this is crazy-cool wordplay LILIANA!!......I LOVE it....and so much of it ties into the abstract aspect with VERY powerful truths ~
~ "A semi sort sore from the stretch of the imagination..."
I'm sorry but this has still got me doing the jigsaw puzzle thing in my head and continually coming up with very reasonable deductions that work perfectly......I LOVE words......and it is quite obvious that you do as well.....so much so as to have constructed the equivalent of what could be called 'a riddle of the mind' and its potential to see or un-see!! (smiles)......abstract poetry? Hmmmm?.....VERY clever stuff dear poet sister!!......a real pleasure........ALL STARS!!......High Fives!!......LOVE & ROCKETS!!.......T xo : )
A riddle of the mind, yes.
There are many, some tongue twisters.
Smiles and thank you. To you.
I can’t pick a favourite line. The entire piece is just perfect. You gave the reader a real visual experience of the discomfort of those ever lingering unwanted thoughts. I loved the use of sand in the eyes. Almost like the sandman tipped way to much in them and forced you to go through lucid dreams of adult themes. Just fantastic writing that oozes a dream like state which is so suited to the very experience being portrayed here 📌⭐️
Thank you so very very much.
A sense of frivolousness that you display so well. As the thought "There are problems in the world, and there's no way to change them". Sometimes, emotions can have a deeper impact than words themselves, and by reading between the lines in this poem, this concept really shines through. Enjoyed Liliana! Peace to you
Wow c right though me.
Cool.
XD! I`m glad I hit the nail on the head, Liliana. Love your take on poetry~
This line is perfect for this adult themed write. Excellent wording throughout. A very, very clever piece x
Thank you.