Poem -
I am alone
The more we talk, the less we have to say
Can you help me out, I can’t communicate
I wanna go deep into the water
But I was made to float
Now I can only see what’s above
I can’t go down below
I don’t like this isolation
What do they have that I don’t?
I don’t like this sensation
why was I made to float?
It’s so lonely up here all on my own
The ocean so big and nothing is known
With fish in the sea
But I am alone
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welcome to cosmofunnel. well written piece. hope to read more from you soon.
Aw thank you very much you just warmed my heart ?
that was really deep. Loved it. your not alone
It is pretty deep but I’m a teenager, hormones are raging what can I do?. And thank you very much
Lovely write. I enjoyed reading this. Well done :)
Wow thank you
Great write enjoyed the read
That means a lot thank you
I liked it
a clever write. i understand the pain and confusion going around the head and those feelings to get dive but made to float. refer to my poems as well it may give you a little comfort .
you can refer my fb page link also about how i got cleared up with my feelings and learned to gush out my feelings. thanks
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I like your poem very much!
It shows how the human brain always uses the same motifs when it desires to express something deep…, transcendent… For example, “water” always symbolizes the hidden part of our soul: “The Unconscious”… And, if one can submerge in its own “darkness”, it could be dangerous because one would have to face strange “creatures” belonging to an “obscure” and “mysterious” world…
Actually these strange creatures like “fishes”, “frogs”, “lizards”, etc, are nothing else than the other people that “you can’t communicate”… In other words, the people you want to understand in the real world are mere “reflections” of these “creatures” that live deep inside your interior “ocean” …. That is clear when you say “The ocean so big and nothing is known /With fish in the sea”… Very nicely expressed!
However you also say “But I was made to float/Now I can only see what’s above /I can’t go down below”… For me this means that you are struggling to destroy your own “Ego”.., your own “Self-Interest” in an effort to re-encounter with all your own interior “I’s”…, to re-encounter with your real “Self”…
I like to think that when the great effort is finally accomplished…, when you could sacrify your own rational “I”, and thus succumb to your own interior abyss…, you won’t feel “lonely” any longer because you will have find God…
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Haha! This is absolutely hilarious coincidence! But I love the poem. I hope you have since moved far from the state of mind. Kind regards. The Fish of the Sea