In Whispered Haze
~ In Whispered Haze ~
Were you just here in whispered haze;
was that your gentle kiss I felt?
Were those your eyes which held my gaze
and caused my broken heart to melt?
It seems like only yesterday
you held me closeβso safe and warm.
We laughed and loved our days away;
we weathered every surging storm.
Was that your voice here in the dark
Β whispering my name discreetly?
And, was it real or just a larkβ
scents of you washed o'er sweetly
It couldn't beβfor you're not here;
foul fate soon stole your love from me.
Yet still, I sense your presence nearβ
it's everywhere, your face I see.
Your smile, it's changedβso broad and grim;
blank stares replaced azure blue eyes.
It is not you whose comeβbut Him...
there is no need now for disguise.
I must now take his hand and go,
tho' I'll return on winter days.
In morning's mist, as white as snow
adrift on woeful whispered haze...
Β
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Hi Dean...Not sure I can say enough about this piece without sounding Β horribly sycophantic my friend!, but it is absolutely and totally enthralling and just one of the most moving pieces I have read in a long time.Loving the wonderful atmosphere created here and the lyrical pacing is just perfect.A great write and one thatΒ I will be returning to frequently...you have a real gift Dean thank you for sharing it with us x
Lodigiana
another creepy one Dean! You have outdone yourself once again
Thanks, Lisa.
I'm grateful for your R&R and glad you enjoyed the poem.
Have a great Saturday,
~Dean γ
Β This is a wonderfully written piece that envokesΒ very strong emotion in readers. Like youβre other poems, it conveys a deeper meaning then what it reads at first glance. You deserve more followers then you have, and I strive to one day be write poetry like yours.
Keep writingΒ
-Anonymous Anonymous
Wow, Anonymous Anonymous!
Thank you for the awesome comments.
Enjoy the week ahead.
~DeanΒ :} β₯
Brilliant Dean! ???
"It seems like only yesterday
you held me closeβso safe and warm.
We laughed and loved our days away;
we weathered every surging storm"Β
fantastic touch to this write! ???
Thanks, Wayne.
I appreciate you highlighting what you liked best about this poem. That kind of feedback is always helpful and appreciated.
Have a wonderful week ahead, my friend!
~DeanΒ :)
No problem, you aswel ??
I can't say enough! Have read and re-read. pinned to re-read. Read it aloud to the room.
So well written as to take me in and make me feel
Great write!Β
John
Thanks, John!
Coming from a poet of your caliber I certainly appreciate and value your opinions very much.
Have a fantastic week ahead, my friend.
~Dean
I love this Dean, if I may... βHimβ? I thought maybe a son or grandson, possibly seeing and hearing likenesses...but βbroad grimβ says possibly not....