Just Like Alice
You made me laugh, the things you said, the things
You did. And it's amazing how love brings
Sparkle and zest for life to the table
When life itself can be so unstable.
And it is easy now to understand
How there, with you, I found my Wonderland -
Just like Alice.
But dark corners lay waiting to be found
Just about everywhere, and gleaming crowns
Slip so easily from those cheating heads
Where demons rise to slay sweet angels dead.
The ground cracked open wide to show me Hell
And there, into the dark abyss, I fell -
Just like Alice.
I know exactly where I am yet still
I feel so lost at times. I wonder will
That demon who sits with me ever go?
Could I ever love again? I don't know,
But in my godforsaken dreams I pray
That Jabberwocky I will duly slay -
Just like Alice.
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Awww wonderfully penned my poetic friend 💕❤️💕
Awww Jill, bless you and thank you sooo very much. I will be sure to catch up with more of your work ⚘x
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Thank you Rob! x
Just wonderful poem
so wonderful
Thank you so much Greg! Glad you like it. Hugs ⚘x
Wow Tina. First of all I love Alice in wonderland so you already had me with the title. Secondly its you! So I knew I was gona like this one. And boy do I!!
Love the metaphor used with alice and about love. It's just utterly brilliant and I always love reading your work. Ssoo pinned! Pxxx
Aww P! Thank you so much for your kind words. I couldn't resist mixing it up a bit with this. I am so glad you thought it worked and you liked it, that's great to know. Thank you soooo much ⚘x
It's tough to read this poem, your poetry is usually very uplifting, I'm sorry you have been wounded, I hope it heals soon, this world needs your heart, fully intact, ready to rid the darkness from the universe.
Love and light x
Hi Gerard. Sorry you found this tough reading! It is not a place where I am currently at. I was hurt badly once but a good deal of time has passed since then and I pulled my self up, sorted myself out and got on with things...much like Alice. I do like to use that experience in my writing though. I went through such a lot that I'm blowed if I let all that be for nothing. I use it for my writing at times. So, although this poem appears otherwise, I am all good thanks! It's just a poem. Thanks for reading and for your concern. Thank you too for the support ⚘x
Betrayal of any sort hurts.....no two ways about it..but it's how you deal with that pain but more importantly how to deal with it without losing the essence of you..how you wear your heart on your sleeve and bravely hope it doesn't get hurt . Lovely piece of work. Lodigiana x
Hi Lodigiana ...thank you sooo much for reading. I agree with you. It is always how we handle the hurt! Unfortunately, all those years ago I did not handle it! Not at all. I have bounced back though, but it has taken a long time. I use the experience I went through as a muse... well I have to make use of what I went through ... or I went through it all for nothing. U am glad you like the poem. Thank you so much for the support ⚘x
you are welcome ♥♥
Although I feel late to the party once again, I`m so glad I checked your account Tina! Smashing poetry and clever analogy of childhood. Sometimes the most important lessons are the hardest teachings. Although I`m not here to preach XD, enjoyed it! Tina
Glad you enjoyed the read Max! Thanks for reading, my friend. I have lots of accounts to catch up on and I will check out yours later... Promise 😊. Thanks again 🌹x
Your work touched my core Tina. I love the way you've conveyed the absolute wonderment and the soul breaking hurt through the comparison to Alice in Wonderland. Most of the fairy tales we read end in triumph but life is mostly not like fairy tales. A lot of us are destroyed by life and love. Most we can do is go on with the bits of us still left.
I wonder sometimes why we were ever blessed with emotions when a lot of us end up locking them all away. You have conveyed all this in a marvelous format and clever lines. You never fail to produce a cracker of a write...pinned ♥️💜
Marion, thank you so much for your beautiful comments. I agree, we trudge on in this life with just the bits of us we have left. I read your wonderful Three poem and I miss those days sooo much. As always, thanks for reading, glad you like it and I send you heartfelt hugs. I am now off to comment on your gorgeous shop poem. I've read it already and been blown away by it. So going to read it again and comment ⚘ x
Again....im not going to talk about my stuff on YOUR page...lol..😘🤩🤗 you are AMAZING and a truly gifted writer!! 🤗🤗
🙄 okay then! 😉 Thank you for your super kind words 🤗💕 x
You are so so so very welcome...highly deserved 😘😘
Nicely penned as usual Tina, and thought provoking.
Its good to be back.
John
Aww thankyou John! Its lovely to see you upon my page again. Glad you like the poem ⚘x
Tina down the rabbit-hole you take us and what a dark view and what a poetic catharsis you take us on.
And a fearless write on betrayal and all it entails within love's boundaries.
Things change sometimes not for the better just at present, but over time, that great healer and keeper of future secrets it can reveal and bestow an unsuspecting surprise of much needed true love and good old fashioned honest concern between two people.
As always a poem to respectfully admire and to view your unique imagination on offer, this time honed from a sad, past adversity.
But remember things change for the better and usually when one least expects or wishes for it.
And you project human emotions so well and so sharply focused.
And keep writing whatever the subject matter and I'll keep reading.
Full honours respectfully given and deserved. 👍
Hi Shaun 👋 Wow! What a thorough review! Yeah, life has many surprises in store for us! I sometimes use past emotions to help me write. I feel myself slip into a particular character and write from that perspective ...not that I am any sort of actress but i do find this happening. I am half way through a poem right now where the character can clearly be seen through the words. Hopefully i will finish it. Anyway, i am really glad you enjoyed the read and thankbyou so very much for leaving g such wonderful detailed thoughts it really is very much appreciated ⚘x
Beautifully written and so sad , You make lyrical magic and prose come alive in this story of your heart and love being betrayed in the worst possible way , Congrats on a great write Tina , And hope life is being kind to a talented poet Cx
Awww thank you Chris! I appreciate your lovely comments. And thank you for reading! Glad you like it. Life is okay thank you ...hope it is for you too ⚘x
Heartbreaking and seemingly hopeless at first. But then there is that glimmer of hope at the end. That is wonderful. Great write, BM. ♥️
Hi Michael 👋 Hope you are well. Thank you so very much for reading. I am glad you liked the poem. The Jabberwocky has to get slain doesn't it? In the end 😉 We all have our demons to slay. Thanks again for the read, comment and pin ⚘x
This had that creepy twist Alice has in her wonderland. I loved how each stanza ended with Just like Alice. And the last lines were just awesome!
That's a fist punch the air moment "Heck Yeah!"
Gwen :) x
🤣🤣 definitely a fist pump in the air moment! Thanks for reading, Gwen, and I am glad you like it. Thank you ⚘x
Alice was a wise girl who fell asleep in a bad /interesting dream.
She awoke and that's what matters.
Alice was, indeed, a very clever girl (Note to self : Be more like Alice). I love your comment Liliana, you are obviously a wise girl yourself! Thankyou for reading and for the pin 🌷x
Very talented you are. Love, they only thing that can make this god forsaken reality palatable and it too can be treacherous... JP
It can be absolutely treacherous!
Thanks for reading, John, and thank you for your kind comment. I appreciate it ⚘x
You are just brilliant. Everytime I read your work, I am just in awe
Thank you Greg! Your comments are always so supportive and I really appreciate it. A big, big thank you x
There is a lesson to be learnt here .. beware of dark corners .. your words also remind me of my own dokun which consists of a pledge, an oath and a creed which I recite every day which begins
Dokun Seikho 1
"Rely on oneself and not on others, no one is more reliable than one's own well disciplined self" ... it goes on and on .. but that's what being a kenshi or student of Kongo Zen encourages ........................................ anyway, I fear I have digressed and probably frightened you away ...
Anyway, it is perfectly clear that I am not the only one who appreciates 'Just Like Alice' and quite write too :)
Thank you, Neville, for your wonderful comment. I always find it fascinating how poetry can get us thinking about all sorts of things. I know stories can too but poetry all the more so. I am honoured that this little poem got your mind pondering things. Thank you 😁 x
UR so very bloomin welcome n truly tooly too :) x
Hi Tina, hope you are very well. Very clever of you to slip into character to chronicle the adversity of betrayal and loneliness. Admirable the courage you display in sharing past hurtful emotions within your poetic art. There is real heart in your poetic tales of the human condition and inspiration for us all. A truly talented writer, whose work is very beautiful and very real. I adore your writing style and I learn from it. Thank you! XX
Hi Tony, you know I always think if I am going to suffer heartache I might as well use it to my advantage and write about it — it's a waste otherwise. In a way it clears all the unwanted baggage out too. I really do appreciate you taking the time to read my work and it makes me really happy to hear that you like it. I love reading and writing poetry. The poem I am currently working on is taking ages. I do admire writers who can constantly write poem after poem really quickly. I usually take ages ...well at least a whole day ... to write a poem. I have done a couple that have taken minutes but on the whole it is a day, though there have been some that have taken me months. So thankyou, a huge THANKYOU, for being so kind about my poems x
Amazing how I was going through your work and just clicked on this one, hey it's much like my poem of the day, superbly written in a way that gives the relativity to the reader but also the hope and light, see I told you we have this inside us. Kudos dearest Being Me. ❤️
Shirley, I have a lot of darkness in me! Less now than before, but I have known it very black .... and bleak. I think poetry is found in the darkness.
Thankyou so much for going back this far and reading this! My goodness, I feel so honoured. I am very grateful for your kindness. I will take a look at yourvpoem later. Im currently at work and being very naughty in finding a quiet place to sneak onto the Cosmoverse. Read you later, my friend, and thanks again xx