love and reason (Shakespearean Sonnet)
Love hath left me bleeding, bruised and broken
Love hath driven its’ jagged dagger in my soul
As Delilah drained vitality from mighty Samson
Love hath taken reason and swallowed me up whole
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her tender lips devoured as a fire devours coal
her words tickled teased and encompassed my pride
Alas, how could I offer protest, as love took hold?
In pleasure, flesh did prosper; alas, my spirit deride
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Then early one morn, from my window came a song
A dirge, with dark foreboding, wording me a knave
less wine, more reason…I longed this consummation
Tis sobering choosing sobriety; better than the grave!
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So, tread ye not on the path of louts and lost men,
embrace reason, embrace love, grief, this may dispel--
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PASSION!! My dear friend... is a challenge nobly displayed...... when using the precision required in the rules set forth for a Sonnet....... the word choices......Olde English and modern makes the passionate ballet that much more powerful...... and the respect I find for the author himself is heralded in the halls of my memory and those fortunate enough to come across this brilliant write will be moved by the seemingly effortless flow of the brushstrokes conveying this subject matter........PINNED this brother poet .......for one reason alone...... it is a triumph!!....... bravo CHRIS!!....... your friend and ever-admirer .......T xo. ?✳✴☀♥
Tony, that is so encouraging my friend, especially for the fact that I'm just learning how to write a sonnet (poetry! over all for that matter, lol) honestly, you should see the expression on my face if I write something half-decent; joy mixed with surprise....believe me, your words really keep me going, I've been on this site a long long time and every time I post something I never really know if it will resonate with anyone, that is a bit of a rush though, to be honest....so glad you understood some of the old words used as well, back in the day, the word 'knave' was common or 'dirge' I swear, I heard them in my head writing, weird huh! yeah then I checked them out in a dictionary and sure enough, they fit, I'll never understand this poetry thing T, part magic me thinks, cheers bro.
Sis, thank you, your comments never fail to enlighten and 'yes' entertain me as well, you are a true artist and critic, great poets from the past were great critics as well, Edgar Allen Poe is one that comes to mind right off the boot, thanks for taking the time and allowing yourself to be drawn into my oddball creations, I appreciate the feedback more than I can say, cheers sis
Great sonnet Christopher,
Love the wording, enjoyed very much!
Lorna xx
thanks a million, Lorna, I'm glad you enjoyed
I love this it has so much compassion I'm it I could feel it deep inside my soul. A message simply said and put into words this truly came from the heart my friend. Thank you for sharing cause I really love reading your poems cause they have meaning and come from the heart and soul.
hey, Michele, thanks for commenting and reading my poems I appreciate very much, I've not been in the mood to write anything recently but sonnets are new and interesting to practice, and they are a bit challenging as well, for me anyway so your feedback is priceless, cheers poet
So entertaining!! Brilliant piece of art! I wish I could!!
thanks for saying that Leah, and you most definitely can, sonnets are a great challenge, hopefully I'll get better at them, appreciate the feedback my friend
This is magnificent, Christopher!
There's a wonderfully clever conceit at the heart of this poem which uses the sonnet form to great effect; playing on the fact that most people expect a sonnet to be a love poem and then promptly spinning from 'love' to 'reason' with the inevitable volta at the beginning of the final quatrain.
Moreover, it displays some exceptional poetic writing. The entire second quatrain is a particular favourite.
Bravo, my friend!
J ;)
thanks a lot Jason for your most generous comment, I'm really pleased you liked it, o my I'm definitely taking notes my friend, appreciate beyond words, cheers poet
It is not easy to write a sonnet
As it is not easy to write in old English
I have failed many times;
It is complex to write as you have;
I think you have done very well;
The topic is that interesting and your style is
to be admired. Well done.
Best from Jai :) ?
thanks Jai, it seems that every time I'm fixing to stop writing poetry I get a comment like yours, it really is something to behold, thanks for saying that, pal, be well
My Brother Poet Chris,
Man's heart oft times is pierced by the feigning femme fatale
Her promise of love reaches into the core of his soul, now pledged to her forever
She proffers her parted pearls, and envelopes him in euphoric ecstasy
But one night, while he rests, she meets another
In a heartbeat, she is gone, leaving her supposed soulmate sobbing
For days he imbibes
For in stupors he finds escape from pains reality
But one day he chooses to be abstemious
In time, he reclaims his reason
Having done this, he now treads lightly
Eschewing the paths of "Louts and Lost Men"
Peace and Love,
Larry xxx
hey brother Larry,
that's beautifully said, my friend you wrote a great poem that is also a comment, totally awesome, thanks and hugs, have great evening
Oh my Christopher! Throughout time you have never failed to blow my mind, incredible my friend! I feel like the beginning theme sets it on a stranded pirate ship I can almost visualize the parrot too!!! Lol I will be back for more my frienc
O Mel! my sweet pal, thank you for your kindness....'time' is but a dandelion seed blowing in the wind...time is a sunbeam on a rose in bloom, or a tiny bell that goes ding a ling a ling, lol...I'm here to 'blow your mind' my friend....'stranded pirate ship, huh?' and a parrot too, wow! that is so much more than I ever could've expected....after every poem I write and someone likes it, I always say to myself; good! so now I don't every have to write another one, lol. Your comment is awesome, cheers pal
I absolutely love your writing! I've read a few of your poems but I must admit that this one in particular spoke to me. It's breathtakingly beautiful!
Amaya, thank you from the bottom of my heart, it gives me joy when a poem connects to the reader, I'm so pleased, thank you again for your kindness, cheers poet
I love this! The style, your words both unique! Very talented!
thank you, Amanda, you're much too kind....'talented!' who me? lol, maybe just a little...'humility' is a work in progress with me; it's the last and most important attribute to achieve...thanks again, poet, and trust me, (all b.s aside) I do need and very much appreciate the encouragement, peace and goodwill
Dear Chris
There is so much tragedy with in this poem
There is so much to give within these words
the promise of love's breach;
then what for the heart hurting
A fine piece that you have written
That symbolizes the tragedy.
You shook the spear on this one :winK
I don't write many:any sonnets as I leave it up to the experts like you. Well done mate!
Luv Jai:)?
lol, I'm quite sure you can write anything you want to write, Jai....and I'm no 'expert' at anything, certainly not sonnets, I'm much better at them now than before though, practice and reading a crap load of sonnets helps a lot....hey, would love to see Jai tackle a sonnet, just saying...cheers bro
Your passion is keen Christopher
ode to 'passion' Lisa, you're very kind, glad you liked
Truly, truly outstanding. I have read this over and over again. Thank you for being an inspiration.
Samantha Cooke, thank you so very much for your kindness, and I'm honored to be an inspiration, take care
Christopher- you are a joy to read! Sonnets are so deceivingly difficult to get right- I should know... I have many crumpled sheets of 'sonnets' filling my waste bin- I can see that we are about to have a 'love /hate' relationship...I love your work and hate that you do it so so well!! Nice work young man!
Lodigiana xx