Poem -
Merry go round
Before I learnt of poetry
I'd write if I felt strongly
Just to put my thoughts on paper
And to read them back
Was good for me
Had no clue that the patterns that I wrote
Would have a format
This was alien to me
Just like...
Some flowers on my doormat
If someone had of asked me
What I reckoned of a Stanza
I'd have said
"Is it a pill you take?"
"For something like a Cancer?"
I am learning
Though I wish that I could just adapt
Much quicker
I annoy myself so often
That I think...
I'm crap
But I'm no quitter
Again though
Is the evidence
Of mysteries eluding me
Another one to keep
Or post?
Or just delete...again
Agree?
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Comments
Hey JOHN!!..... you ask ~ delete?.....NO way!!..... the fact that you'd been putting thoughts and feelings down on paper far before you began to take 'poetry' seriously says so much about your need for self expression...... you're doing a great job so far... it's what everyone does.... you have to start somewhere right?..... and you keep doing VERY clever (original) things like you did here with the word 'Stanza'.....a pill for cancer???!!!.... made me laugh for sure! ?.... anyway, sorry for babbling on!!..... my point is that you have one of the most important pieces down already.....HONESTY!!.....there's pure honesty running through this write.....and readers ALWAYS respond to honesty!!...... keep up the great work dear poet brother!!.......LOVE and ROCKETS!!.....T xo ?☀✴♥✳??
Hi Tony, thank you! I appreciate your support and advice enormously, I don't think you babble on at all! You give praise and advice as you see fit, in an engaging , friendly, and intelligent manner, for which I am very grateful! Cheers!☺
Hi John, what an interesting piece you have written here! You have explained so well just how we all come to poetry..through initial doubt, taking a step in the dark and discovering that maybe just maybe we ARE able to express our feelings and thoughts for others to read and enjoy..just as you have here! Nice work , very nice work!
Lodigiana xx
Thank you ever so much for your wonderful comment Lodigiana! I'm truly grateful! As you probably know I am quite new to this, but I appreciate your support and interest!cheers☺
Strong lyrical voice! Lines are broken well. Difficult to write about writing but you seem to pull it off. :-)
Thank you Jennifer! Much appreciated ☺
Another great write John, I know exactly where you're coming from on this one. I myself just write whatever I find appealing or interesting. I don't think I'll ever "fit in" I'm not saying that's your intention but I think you get the gist of what I'm trying to say. I've only ever contemplated deleting a poem twice and I'm glad I never on both occasions.
Look forward to reading more from you - Syd
Much appreciated Syd! Just a bit of personal frustration, as you know already. I just want to mix it up a bit, without falling into familiar patterns. I've read some really quite abstact stuff recently which I really enjoyed, and admire, and would love to attempt, but my brain just doesn't work that way atm! But we'll see.... Thanks for stopping by, and supporting me mate, it means a lot!☺