Message Version 3.
Updated 16/03/21 (Aus)
Magic, elastic.
Propositions, fantastic.
Learning, diverting
Adapting, deserving
Trapped analogy
Dust settles.
Meddle.
Throw pebbles.
But they never weigh enough.
Something is trouble, I`m stuffed
But when I look at all those answers, I
Sea, the Fish.
In a turning book of turning tides.
And the pages keep turning. Older, wiser. Prouder yet more regrets.
Worrisome, with a new intent.
Yet learning, unrelenting.
Repeat after me...
“Oh, now I get it.”
“Oh, now I get it.”
“Oh, now I get it.”
Until you lose your voice.
Waking up from waking up from waking up.
Until we fall asleep forever.
Its a bullet through the heart.
It`s the jump now or never.
So "turn baby turn"
I have no control
This book is in its final chapter.
And the bio is the eulogy.
For what does it matter?
The Fish of the Sea.
This one`s a working progress. Awesome poets, please show your support and I`ll write more!!! Smiles and peace always. Max.
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You have my full encouragement and support Max.
I'm sorry but I'm not much of a critique but I definitely like the message and direction of this piece.
Take care - Syd
Thanks Syd! I know I`m not one to have the greatest vocabulary or poetic voice. I`m always looking for new ideas and topics. Glad you liked it. Please feel free to let me know if you have any feedback!
Kind regards, your friend, Max
Sheer brilliance Max love thisun, both concept and your creativity 💕❤️💕⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️
Thanks Jill! More coming soon I hope!
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Nice work Max x
Thanks Marion!!! Not one of my best but glad you enjoyed it. Peace and smiles to you. Hugs!!
Gifted writing Fish. Keep writing!!!
Thanks so much, JP!! Truly, your words mean so much to me
Max, I'm hooked line and sinker just from your opening stanza's then starts moving, moving, moving and all against the established poetry grain.
Unique, experimental are understatement's and love reading something different, something from the left field.
You certainly have my blessing and moral support to continue, develop flesh out Max!!!
Superb and five stars and pinned.
A great read and concept all in one poetry bundle.
Thanks Max and keep chipping away and persevering.
Wow, thank you Shuan, really you`re such a kind soul. To be honest, I most enjoy these styles of writes, it's just hard to form as I want all my poetry to be unique, that becomes difficult with a limited vocabulary. Thank you so much again, truly, for all your comments, I must say that all my followers inspire me to keep writing and exploring. I have to go now, but I promise I`ll come back this arvo to have a look at your private message. Hope you are well my friend, and thanks once more for being an awesome poet. Smiles. Your friend Max.
The picture with the work reminds me of the movie " Message In A Bottle " which shows us how important it is to form relationships to strengthen life, and love, before it is too late. Remember what brings you joy, and fulfillment......and, you cannot go far wrong. If, goodness be within you, and you wish to respect all life.
Give to another to help yourself. A caring attitude, with love sharing properties, defines life, and its enrichment.
All the best to you. :)
I dont know of the movie but thanks so much. Your words of encouragement and support mean so much to me. Smiles and calm waters to you also!!
It’s almost a song isn’t it, I want to go grab my guitar and sing it :) I loved it so much. The mantra :
life can feel like we are constantly having our own minds moulded into one way of thinking and seeing. That at times, when we reflect deeply, maybe in meditation. We wake ourselves to an alternative perspective.
I got a lot from reading this. Thank you for the reflection 🌻😊
Ahhh, thank you! You have somehow managed to pinpoint my favourite part of my work yet again! No, thank you for your kind and extremely generous comments!