My Love, You Are Immortal
My love,Â
You are immortal.
Because of me
Your life will know no end.
Long after we have both left this earth
You will live on,
And perhaps I too;
For in granting you eternal life,
By writing you into a limitless existence
With the spillage from this heart you broke,
I suppose I have sworn myself to the same fate.
If I cannot have you in this lifetime,
Know that now I will have you in the next
And the next and the nextâŠ
We will live on in these pages,
Ever intertwined
In a neverending story
Until the whole world burns.Â
My love,
We are immortal.
Because of me
Our lives will know no end.
Oh,
What have I done?
Now you will have my heart until the end of time
And it will stay broken just as long.Â
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Comments
And is there any better way to immortalise a love, especially one that may have been unrequited, than in poetry? "And perhaps I too" is a strange line to put in. Unless the writer intends to be anonymous. But then where love is concerned how anonymous can one be? "With the spillage from this heart you broke" is a great line. And I like the determination of having you in the next life and the next and the next.
I really like the italicised lines at the end. For me the first line implies doubt in the person who wrote it. They have achieved what they set out to achieve but at what cost to themselves. Great last line.Â
Hi Bernie!
I think perhaps that line was read too much as a standalone instead of being understood cohesively as part of something bigger. This line displays the first spark of the realisation, that evolves as her writing continues. Sheâs trying to hold onto him through her poems, she wants their love to be endless through her words, but she realises that she cannot write of him and their love without also immortalising herself; they go hand in hand. Which means also immortalising her heartbreak that they are no longer in love.Â
âYou will live on, and perhaps I too; for in granting you eternal life, by writing you into a limitless existence, âŠ.. I suppose I have sealed myself to the same fate.âÂ
Iâm so glad that the italicised verse translated. I really wanted to give it that internal monologue to emphasise her deep realisation about what she has done. You couldnât have put it better. She did what she had intended but it came at a cost. Thank you for a great comment xÂ
And thank you for your insights into your poem. I have enjoyed reading your poems.Â
You are very welcome.Â
I am so glad! :)
Shakespeare did this, too. He wrote about his love so that they would stay immortal and forever young. I love your poem x
I will have to look this up! Thank you for your comment x
It's Sonnet 18 and begins Shall I compare thee to a summer's day ... something like that x
Very good poem missymarie. Unconditional love! Happy writings, BÂ
Thank you Bernadete x
A very emotional poem.
Best of wishes going forward.
Thank you Wilford! :)
Some pretty cool and deep stuffÂ
the ownership is out of this worldÂ
Iâll give you a follow for sure đ«Ąđ
Thank you Thomas! :)