Never Empty
Consumed!!
Drawn
Into
Darkness,
Unable
To
Break
Free…..
Is it just a habit?
This very aching need
Smoothy
Does
The
Amber
Nectar
Flow
And
Fill
The
Pores
Congesting all the emptiness
Forgetting all that’s raw
Down
Into
Oblivion
Thats
The
Only
Place
To
Be
Disjoining any troubles
Until you cannot see.....
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The formatting here is a masterstroke ... particularly the last sliding line from:
It has the double effect of mirroring the downward spiral into alcoholism and slightly disorienting the reader...giving us the mind-bending feeling of what the inside of that spiral is like.
Simple, elegant and extremely effective.
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Thank you Sweetheart, You are always very thoughtful in your comments
Very glad you liked it
Love
Lorna xxxx
Good writing.
thanks, Glad you enjoyed
Lorna
x
The literal pitfall slide of alcohol consumption done effortlessly and uniquely.
Lorna a wise message done in what's deemed concrete poetry.
A message that many learn from but some never truly recover.
Anyway... Cheers for writing this Lorna and hope all is well :)xx.
Hi Shaun,
thanks again
yes somone I know well has this as a pretty awful vice...and it's not nice to experience...Im not adverse to alcohol at all, but it's scary what it can do to people and those around them
Thanks again
Lorna xx