Night

Night

Evening begins
Night's a mystery
Wonders of stars
How many do I see?
Cool air whizzes through me
From above it shines
Milky and glowy
Can’t touch, want to
Can’t reach, want to
Following me
Just an illusion
Shadows created
Reality
Evenings ending
Night's began
I wonder aroundΒ 
Hoping I’ve won

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Sarfraz Ahmed

Pratibha what an amazing poem! So atmospheric, so multi-layered, so magical. We want more!

​Well done!Β 

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Pratibha Savani

Thank you my very first one published online!!
Its very encouraging to do more x

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Pratibha Savani

Thank you for the comment. Its my first poem published online!

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Just one bit of advice...something no one told me when I first started here. Don't become discouraged if you don't get a lot of feedback at first. continue to write and comment on other's work. Remember everyone here can get more focused on receiving feedback rather than giving it. and I'm ashamed to say I can be that way sometimes too. I do strive to return the favor more readily if someone comments a lot and checks in to see if I posted something new

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Pratibha Savani

Ok thank you. I wanted to connect with others who write so I'm really looking fwd to reading more on here. It's so fascinating and the types of writing.Β 

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Swati B

This one feels exciting and intriguing 🌍

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Terry Reeves

Very good Pratibha - please don't be so good
otherwise you're going to beat me!Β 

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Pratibha Savani

🀣🀣🀣🀣
Thank you Terry. Glad you like it. Always like the night sky!! It is an old piece now!!
There is far too much good writing on here! I do not think I will beat anyone!!! πŸ˜ƒ P x

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Terry Reeves

See - you did beat nearly everyone.
Congrats.
terry.
x

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Pratibha Savani

🀣🀣🀣
Thank you kindly Terry. Proper surprised me this. 😲 Px

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Simon Bromley

Excellent write I agree with poetess because I too have had excellent feedback to having hardly none and I nearly walked away twice, but on here you'll learn and work with others like poetess who are an inspiration to help you more as a writer.Β  Good luck.

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Pratibha Savani

Hi Simon. Thank you for the stars and like. Much appreciated.Β 
Good you are still on this site and enjoying cosmo now x

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Wilford Barker

There is a softness about this poem.. from beginning to end.. a very cool read
well written Pratibha Savani.Β 
Thanks for the ink.
Be blessed.

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Pratibha Savani

Hi Wilford. Thank you for the comments and like. Good to hear how you felt after reading it. I wrote this as a student so its quite an old write now but so pleased it is making some sounds waves on here πŸ˜ƒ

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Being Me

This is lovely, Pratibha...congrats on the nomination!

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Jill Tait

Lovely β€οΈπŸ’—β€οΈ

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Jill Tait

β€οΈπŸ’—β€οΈ

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Pratibha Savani

Omg Greg I'm truly shocked especially since there is a phenomenal amount of exceptional poems on cosmo. It's really made my day. Thank you for your kind words and support. Px

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Greg Etsell

You are so welcome I’ve been nominated many times but never one yet someday I hope to

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Pratibha Savani

Yes you will you are an exceptional writer I'm always reading your stuff even though I've only been on here short while lol!!
Keep writing mate Px

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Greg Etsell

Thank you so much that means a lot to me have a wonderful day

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Jill Tait

Huge Congratulations Hunnybun ❀️❀️❀️ ⭐️OMG I’ve been so near & yet so far away from Β this πŸ’—πŸ’•πŸ’—

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Pratibha Savani

Thank you Jill as I mentioned in previous message totally surprised me. Really help encourage me as a poet writer.Β 
I love reading your writes really cool fun reads you so would win!!

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Jill Tait

Naaa don’t think Admin likes my style of rhyming xxx but hey ho I can live in hope & try harder lol β€οΈπŸ’—β€οΈWell Done my loveβ­οΈβ€οΈπŸ’•β€οΈ

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Pratibha Savani

Thats crazy you have a wicked writing style the queen of narrative!!
I really dont know how they select nominees and winners and there is nothing written on the site either.
Thanks for your comments its most appreciative 😘 Px
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Jill Tait

Awww u r a ⭐️Love β€οΈπŸ’—β€οΈβ­οΈ

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GIAMPIERO FENU

Congratulations on being one of the contest winners with me !!Β  πŸ˜ƒπŸ˜ƒ

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Pratibha Savani

Woohoo!! Was totally surprised! Thank you kindly Giampiero 😁 Px

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Neetha Y

Congratulations on winning. Beautifully writtenΒ 

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John Loopstra

Love the expression of the wonders to be had at night.

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