Poem -
Shattering the Crown
A Syllabic
Shattering many sentimental dreams
Broken down the instrumental seams
Breeze through momentary starts.
Breaching, steps apartΒ
Deeper down
Crown,
Not a clown.
Fears dwell within hearts,
Where stars aline, never parts
Broken down the instrumental seams.
Shatterproof yet intrinsical it beams
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Comments
Lorna I'm on lunch here at the museum and Good LordΒ look what I find.
Another superb write and you don't need stars to align to offer up any lucky reader a touch of class.ππΌ
See you soon bonny lassΒ and I'll reply to your superb message later tonight.
In the meantime my tuna pasta bake awaits!!!!Β π
Hello Shaun, ..it was a challenge on a Facebook poetry site which I joined in, so I thought have a go, so thank you for your lovely commentΒ
enjoy the rest of your day and your pasta bake xx
Lovely write my friend. I so enjoy reading your works of art
Ahh thank you that is very kind of you to sayΒ
Lorna xx
A fab rhyme scheme and form , great structure formatting , abstract muse woah.Β Kudos!!
plz also read and comment my newest poem too.
Thank you for the lovely comment, I will be over soon to have a look at your latest:)Β
Ah yes this freedom stuff, isn't it just wonderful. Such a very creative write. πΉ
Thanks ShirleyΒ
much appreciatedΒ
Glad you liked it
LornaΒ
I don't know if I'm right but I got a sense of sad determination from this...a determination to succeed in the end or at least keep.trying but I could be way off. A great write regardless xx
Of course you're spot on MarionΒ
I was very unwell this time last year and it's about trying to keep myself well whether I like it or not haha
much appreciatedΒ
Lorna xxx
Just. Absolutely linked. No broken muse, no lost context, everything a poet hopes to achieve, you have achieved in this write. Something to look up to. Just fantastic poetry!
Hello and thank you
very much appreciated
I'm very glad you enjoyed this one
Lorna xx
This is not only brill .. you are clearly a whole lot braver than me x
Hello Neville,
I'm glad you enjoyed it, ...brave is not what I would call myself...I'm definitely on the more wimpy side haha
thank you so much for your lovely words xxx