SIN WILL WIN
Infatuated with non medical chemicals
Manufactured by money hungry fools
Creative senses, overactive
Every thought, hyperactive
Upbeat tempo
Rapid breaths
Sounds like you've had
Crystal Meth.
Medicated with the medicinal
Sedated by the asylums rules
Imagination, no existence
Mental status, torn and twisted
Slow breaths
Slurred speech
Plenty of pills
One of each.
Addicted to smoking cigarettes
Took a drag to win a bet
The high school hero, at any cost
My health, my money, all was lost
Tight chest
Cough and wheeze
Sounds like cancer
Deaths' disease.
Alcoholism runs in the genes
Started in my early teens
Intoxicated, ignorance
No such thing as common sense
Relieving tension
Yellowed skin
Swollen liver
Bottle of gin.
Ingest the Genie
Drink the Djinn
In the end
The sin will win...
Carey Milton ©
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This write was an overwhelming read for me......... it's as though we were leading parallel existences (providing there's some truth to this for you personally)......... regardless~ the subject matter is handled so beautifully...... each stanza speaking to varying levels and repercussions of addiction and the addictive personality......... and on top of that it is so poetically delivered............. well conceived and BEAUTIFULLY delivered sweet poetess...... wow......... you're such a good writer........... looking forward to that book I've been hearing about.......... from a personal place.........I LOVE THIS write.......... honestly profound!!........... high fives........T xoxo
Spoken from experience on so many levels my dear friend so no research or word of mouth needed to conceive this write. I feel I have been center stage with every poem I have written or at least had front row seats. Empathetic souls tend to witness worlds beyond any yonder so I truly appreciate your taking time to reply with such enthusiastic and enlightening feedback as always.
Your words never go astray my friend. :)
Carey x
Carey, first off; really well done....reading poetry makes the reader think, or suspend his disbelief; all I ever ask for when I read one....this one makes me think; not so much the content; you spelled that out very well...what you make me think about and appreciate; as a perpetual student of poetry, is your approach; very liberating; how you wrote this one; like you stood on a rock and dove head first into a cool body of water and just swan until you felt satisfied; that was so cool....I like this poem, Carey, it wasn't life changing; never read one that was.... but this is really good....you are one of the best poets to ever post on here, so I won't feel obliged to stroke you with compliments, but I must say that you've taught me something about approach, today...I'm here mostly to learn, and that I did, so thank you very much....have a great day
Cherie xx
Thanks for reading this piece..wasn't prepared to pussy foot around with this one...
Love always sis
Carey xx
Hi Carey Milton,
Great write, thanks for sharing, my applause, my vote, I love the below lines
Love & Hugs
Willy