Poem -
Sink or Swim
No prejudice
Without repentance
Unceasing moments, saturating truth
Incessantly down it falls in drops and streams
Sopping wet,
Yet still unyielding
Slipping feet feel sore in sodden shoes
Each foothold more difficult
As the sole burns
Sludging on with each step
Relentlessly it pours - Β unable to see
Uncertain in direction
Disorientation seeps cold
Icy trickles unwelcome
Unable to peel free
As the shirt on your back
glues itself to the contours of your body
Each movement more savage than the last
deep pools mostly filled
Tidal highs rise as the Island is surrounded
Blind cold and alone
Choices seem few
Allow the submergence
Or remove shoes, dive in
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Comments
it is so wonderful to see you back girl... but damn that troublemaker is still on here. lol
hiya, I just thought I'd pop my head in as I was missing you lovely lot.
I'll steer clear of any trouble hahaha
hope your well xxxx
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I will keep up with your work, since you're the best.Β
aww...thanks Lisa, I love your work too xxx
"Slipping feet feel sore in sodden shoes..." Talk about alliteration and consonance! This line has an abundance of both, Lorna.
As a life-long writer and fan of structured poetry, it wasn't until very recently I learned a greater appreciation for free style, free verse poetry.
I felt this was sensational and very emotionally driven.
Excellent writing, Lorna.
~Dean Kuch
Hi Dean, thank you so much for your comments, they really are appeciated I've been dabbling with freestyle recently and quite enjoying it. Its not as restictive as the traditional forms so I think you can often say too much.
I do enjoy many of the more traditional styles I have a few sonnets and villanelles on here too...I'll be over to have a look at your work soon
Lorna :)
You're very kind, Lorna, and also very welcome as well.
It's an excellent poem.
~Dean :)
Canβt email for awhile reached my limit
Will twitter u
Love it... thanks
hi Lorris...thank you so much....hope your well
Lorna xx
Hello Lorna...
Good to see you!
Awesome write as always!
Thank you for sharing...
Hugs...
sparrowsong
hi Sparrowsong,
glad you liked it, thought I'd say Hi as I've missed you lot xx
Hey LORNA!!....SO glad to see you on the pages......I really like what you've done here...... the words leading you the entire way.... like a chrysalis to butterfly ~Β or the 'Incredible Hulk's' transformation....." Each movement more savage than the last.."...... love the continuity of intent bear poet sister!!....ALL STARS!!.... well done .......Much love to you and yours!!.......T xo ??β₯
hi Tony, thank you so much for your kind comment...I think I like the incredible hulk analogy best haha...ive missed you lot
All my love
Lorna
xxx
With so much said I am but an echo.Β
Well written, enjoyed, and other praises
heard and repeated,
only new thing to say is,
I enjoyed reading tour Poem
John
Hi John, I really appreciate you taking theΒ time to comment. I'm really happy you enjoyed this
thank you
Lorna xx
Awesome!
thank you Barbara xx
Hi Lorna,
glad to see you back..Β
A literary cunning..
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hi Leigh, thanks for your comment glad. to be back
love
lorna
My Dear Lorna,
Downward I spiral
I sink to depths of my soul
Pure pain propels me
Do I fight for survival
Or cede to this Hell within
All my love,
Larry xxx
thanks dear friend LarryΒ
submerged in the depths
I will not sink in despair
but swim to survive
All my love LornaΒ
My Dear Lorna,
She swims to safety
No man can be her island
This mighty woman
All my love,
Larry xxx
I was missing your brilliant work.Β I am glad you came back on.Β Love your poetry it truly inspires me.Β You should be on here more! Your art here is appreciated.Β Β
thanks for your kind words gregΒ Β
glad.to be back
Lorna x