Surrender

Louise, what a wonderful comment thank you very much for taking the time to read my work and giving honest intelligent feedback....high five my friend, I appreciate 

thank you so much for comment Lily Mae, and I beg to differ; you have indeed given me 'intelligent feedback....you say this is a 'powerful erotic write' and I don't disagree with you; it is your opinion.... yet the 'poem' does not describe a 'traditional' sexual encounter just a woman thinking about a 'shadow man' who could very easily be a television character, an internet 'virtual lover' or even a 'fantasy in her head'....and it is said that the 'brain' is the most important 'sexual organ' so maybe in 2015 this is perhaps truly a 'modern traditional' kind of 'erotica' who knows? ...though your statement initially started making me wonder why you would call it 'powerful erotica'....while I was doubting myself for labelling it 'erotica' in the first place.. maybe this is not an 'erotic' poem at all but more or less a characterization of a lonely repressed woman... and the reader is given a glimpse of her thought stream, and I'm not saying that's what it is, but it opens the 'possibility'  at least for me....she thinks about 'sex' but seems to value 'companionship' awakening of some sort of  'passion'  even 'compliments' more than sex itself.... and even the 'touch' she speaks of that causes 'the dripping of her honey' is compared to 'music' of all things; obviously sex is a 'want' but she seems to be 'trading' the 'desires' of the 'shadow man' for all the things she really seems to 'need' and value, and her values are different than his....honestly Lily Mae I appreciate your feedback very much....'erotica' is at times fun and interesting for me to write; but I have severe issues with repetition in poetry, I get bored easily (with my own work, often) so I always 'try' to put a different spin or perspective on a topic and erotica can be a challenge.... should you be 'graphic' and use certain 'tried and tested' words for 'shock value' or to establish a certain tone, or avoid them altogether and try to 're invent the wheel' or demonstrate your vocab or level of sophistication? to be honest I don't know...but I always try to be 'fresh' with a post, so I won't post unless the write takes me places....poetry can't be 'controlled'  I believe it should 'appear' to the 'poet' and have an individual identity....sounds 'weird'  but why write something if you already 'know'  how it will 'turn out'  where is the 'fun' or 'edifying' value in that?  

Hey I did set out to write a long drawn out comment on your 'feedback' just to show you that you were 'wrong' about not giving 'intelligent feedback'  lol...cheers Lily Mae....I know I'm a long winded bastard...no apologies D

thank you so much for comment Lily Mae, and I beg to differ; you have indeed given me 'intelligent feedback....you say this is a 'powerful erotic write' and I don't disagree with you; it is your opinion.... yet the 'poem' does not describe a 'traditional' sexual encounter just a woman thinking about a 'shadow man' who could very easily be a television character, an internet 'virtual lover' or even a 'fantasy in her head'....and it is said that the 'brain' is the most important 'sexual organ' so maybe in 2015 this is perhaps truly a 'modern traditional' kind of 'erotica' who knows? ...though your statement initially started making me wonder why you would call it 'powerful erotica'....while I was doubting myself for labelling it 'erotica' in the first place.. maybe this is not an 'erotic' poem at all but more or less a characterization of a lonely repressed woman... and the reader is given a glimpse of her thought stream, and I'm not saying that's what it is, but it opens the 'possibility'  at least for me....she thinks about 'sex' but seems to value 'companionship' awakening of some sort of  'passion'  even 'compliments' more than sex itself.... and even the 'touch' she speaks of that causes 'the dripping of her honey' is compared to 'music' of all things; obviously sex is a 'want' but she seems to be 'trading' the 'desires' of the 'shadow man' for all the things she really seems to 'need' and value, and her values are different than his....honestly Lily Mae I appreciate your feedback very much....'erotica' is at times fun and interesting for me to write; but I have severe issues with repetition in poetry, I get bored easily (with my own work, often) so I always 'try' to put a different spin or perspective on a topic and erotica can be a challenge.... should you be 'graphic' and use certain 'tried and tested' words for 'shock value' or to establish a certain tone, or avoid them altogether and try to 're invent the wheel' or demonstrate your vocab or level of sophistication? to be honest I don't know...but I always try to be 'fresh' with a post, so I won't post unless the write takes me places....poetry can't be 'controlled'  I believe it should 'appear' to the 'poet' and have an individual identity....sounds 'weird'  but why write something if you already 'know'  how it will 'turn out'  where is the 'fun' or 'edifying' value in that?  

Hey I did set out to write a long drawn out comment on your 'feedback' just to show you that you were 'wrong' about not giving 'intelligent feedback'  lol...cheers Lily Mae....I know I'm a long winded bastard...no apologies D

Lucas thank you plenty...my friend I will post poetry just for your comments alone, not even kidding.... that is awesome to read!  You 'got' the poem and I love your syntax bro. very cool....in appreciation, have good evening

Mark, thank you so much my awesome soul brother from the south, appreciate the encouragement even though I haven't been on here much lately...have good evening