Poem -
The Other Side Of Me
Can you see the other side of me?
Like the dark side of the moon
So Mysterious
No one has explored
So Unearthly
No life to be seen
So Old
Its rivers dried up
So Lifeless
No air to breathe
So Lonely
It never sees the sun
So Eerie
No gravity to pull you down
Can you see the other side of me
That no one else can see?
Pratibha Savani Feb 2021
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Comments
what great poem
it is so interesting
that favent been to the dark side
i wonder if they ever will
right now they want to go
to mars more
Thank you Greg. I know this one is a little different.
They haven't been to the moon in decades....some people speculate if they even went there at all!
Thanks for the ace pin my friend! Px
Wow I love this perceptionPratibha my clever, creative Chickadee ❤️💕❤️Pinned
Phew thanks Jill! I know it is a little different from my usual writes. I have dark poems in my book and havent written much somber moods one since. I like that nickname btw!! Thanks for the fabulous pin!! Px 💕💕💕
Awww u r so welcome my Hunnybun ❤️💜❤️
🥰🥰🥰 thank you my friend. Px 💕
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Powerful phrasing throughout this piece.....leading the reader to the place where you/the author truly become the enigmatic!!......ALL STARS!!.....cool stuff dear poet sister!!.....LOVE & ROCKETS!!......T xo : )
Thank you Tony for the wonderful comments and glad you enjoyed it. It is a bit different write to my others! Px
Pratibha,
Totally love your new style. Love your choice of words. So creative.
Totally Brilliant x
Thank you Sarf and the pin! Completely different write to my current usual but was thinking of the moon and this came into being!
Love it Pratibha! We ALL have a dark side to us...not always in a sinister way. We humans do like to hoard and hide...I guess we do that with ourselves too. Fabulous poem 🙂 x
Aaaww thank you Tina for reading. I value your comments and thank you for supporting my writes. Px 😁😁😁
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So clever written with the comparison of the dark side of the moon.
A real private mystery and so love how you begin and end asking the reader the same question.
We all have a dark side, we all stumble and we all fall, for we're all human and that's life, that's how it is, how we work, but that side we learn to control and suppress.
We can't all be on top of our game all the time.
But there's much more goodness in us than it's polar opposite.
And we hopefully learn from it and move on.
Thanks for writing and sharing Pratibha and for making me think and reflect.
Five stars and pinned for a soul-searching reread on a rainy day.
I wish you well and hang in there like the rest of us mere mortals ,stay safe and one day at a time.🙂
Hi Shaun. Thank so much for your kind comments! Really appreciate it and the pin 😁
Nice to know it had an impact and you like my layout/style. I only joined cosmo last april and it has really helped me solidify that I can still write and it can create impact and that I'm a poet lol. Didnt have anyone read my writings before 2020.
Have a fab day. It's another sunny one ☀️☀️☀️
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Thanks Marion and for the wonderful pin Px 💕💕💕
Hello, I enjoyed this piece. The style and also how you delved the readers imagination into that eerie, unknown side of the moon. Weaving within it the concept of your own hidden self. We all have that inner hidden persona. You just took it to another level, using that enigmatic moon. Fabulous idea! Wonderful to read ✨👏🌻
Thank you Gwen for the lovely comments! Really appreciate the feedback to a new style i ended up doing. I know it is a bit different but it just worked with the moon side we dont see and I love using metaphors.
Thbank you for taking time to read back my poems. Pxxx
Hi P! I saw that you were online recently so I decided to have a look at your work... I was stunned when I saw this write. What an awesome poem. The structure is super captivating, and I love the theme. The dark side of the moon... a place unknown. Fantastic poetry here my friend. Kudos! Your fish fan, Max
Hi Max! Thank you for taking the time to look back and read. Wow thanks for the amazing comments and pin. I was amazed by the comments after I posted this one. Sometimes we get it all right...sometimes we hit a brick wall!
I havent been on here much lately. Getting some work done at home at the moment so distracted with that.
You are always a delight to see on my posts. Thank you Max you little star. Pxxx