To Be Perfect
I want to unzip my skin
Peel away the layers
Become unfamiliar to myself
Or perhaps,
Find the core of who I used to be
I see you with your painted smile
A shaggy rag of cocky hangs in your eyes
But you never really looked at me
Not really
A pebble on your road to greatness
I want to become something new
Naked and unafraid
Strip away the bruising wounds
But forgotten
The wounded fester and decay
I see you sterilized
Untainted, untouched, unafraid
Blind to the blood still seeping
And shallow
A hollow shadow of the girl you used to be
I want to shatter this reflection
Unhinge your perfect world
Stand naked, bleeding, weeping
Yet never
Because I am too afraid
I see you shake your head
Condescension, dismissal,
Rolling eyes, a sigh of irritation
An embarrassment
Must we really go through this again
I want to unzip my skin
Perhaps, maybe, but then again
This old suit fits and wears me perfect
For survival… for protection
I keep your painted smile in place
RRG © 8.26.19
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Comments
so powerful and deep.
Thanks so much Ebrahim.
Rip it off, shout and scream.
Lol.... Sure. Easy to say, not so easy to do. :) Thanks Gerard.
Wow!! REBECCA!!..... this is an extremely well considered and BEAUTIFULLY delivered piece of poetic creativity..... the phrasing is crazy-unique!!..... the over-all craftsmanship is genuinely clever and the imagery tops it all off...... creating a VERY compelling and profound insight into self-reflection and the potential it has for depression to rear its ugly head...... some lines truly SHINE ~
~ "I want to unzip my skin
peel away the layers
become unfamiliar to myself..."
Brilliant construction here.... reminds me VERY much of Franz Kafka......I can't say enough about this write.... I've read it over several times and am impressed more each time through...... especially because it stands the test of being read aloud so well!!......ALL STARS & PINNED for perfection!!..... bravo dear poet sister!! ???.......LOVE & ROCKETS!!.....T xo ?❤
Thank you so much Tony. A real pleasure to have you visit and share in my poetry. Your comments always make me smile. Blessings friend poet.
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WOW! Now I am extremely flattered by the comment you left on my poem. This is mind-blowingly emotional and alliteratively pleasing to the point of addictive verbal fixation. The imagery and the orginal, dark, powerful choice of words and manner of articulation is ASTOUNDING! Beyond Beautiful, babe!
pinned!
Thank you so very much. It is an honor to have a talented poet share such praise. I think I blushed fifty shades of pink. A real pleasure Twilla. Blessings and hugs.
Thats just how I felt after I read your work! Lol
<3 I rarely read my work aloud. So to hear others talk about how wonderful it sounds is humbling. I thank you dear friend.
I litterally got up immediately after posting that comment and went to the other end of the house to find my S/O and read that to him and told him that I was newly made a fan to a poet I'd not encountered before. When I read this he was blown away. I think I read your work better than my own! Im not sure you Can read this without giving it the appropriate weight ofemotion.
Reeboka,
That WAS truly impressive! Beautifully written.
Heartbreaking, powerful, and bare.
Great job.
Matthew.
Thank you Mathew. A pleasure to share with you. Blessings kind friend.
You're welcome, and the pleasure was all ours, for getting to read that.
Have a great day!
Matthew.
Wow....now i know you....i think....Excellent write....all yours
Perhaps ;) Once never truly knows. Hello Lorris, thank you very much.. Blessings
This is an excellent write Rebecca. Pinned. There are many brilliant lines...Here's one that caught my eye
Great stuff - Syd
Thank you so much. What a joy to have you visit my page. Blessings