Vicious Circle
A few counselling sessions
To change my cynical perceptions
A dose of CBT
To stop me from being me
Put worries on the shelf
Make time for myself
A sertraline under my tongue
Makes everything feel numb
Rewire my broken brain
Make me feel better again
Start to plan for tomorrow
Hope instead of sorrow
The sun is shining today
No longer cold and grey
Life is getting busy
I'm starting to feel dizzy
I'm in too much of a hurry
I'm now starting to worry
The waters boiling now
It's right up to my brow
Now its starting to spill
Burning others against my will
I'm sobbing on the phone
Frightened and alone
I'm frazzled and burnt out
My conscience begins to shout
My mind silently screams
And starts to invade my dreams
Some help is needed now
Oh doctor tell me how?
A few counselling sessions
To change my cynical perceptions
A dose of CBT
To stop me from being me
Put worries on the shelf
Make time for myself
A sertraline under my tongue
Makes everything feel numb
Rewire my broken brain
Make me feel better again
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WOW!! JAYNE!!....this is a TRULY powerful write!!...Filled with complete honesty, as to the truth of the doctor - patient relationship.....but more to the agony caused by being caught up in the 'Never-Ending" cycle of being treated with drugs that help you feel better until you no longer feel anything at all or have to deal with a plethora of new and unwanted reactions and ramifications !! You've described it Incredibly well as the poem itself goes around in one big circle....hence, its Title ~ "Viscous Cycle".....a VERY viscous cycle indeed!! Personally, I take 16 pills a day to deal with Chronic Pain...and trust me, there are times when i want "Off the Merry-Go-Round"!!.....Fuckin' Sucks!!.....Anyway, This is an absolutely BRILLIANT poem.....in every way!!.....the attention to detail...the fine sense of poetic rhythm and timing....the overall craftsmanship is VERY well conceived and BEAUTIFULLY delivered!!......ALL STARS & PINNED!!.....I could really go into much more detail but it would be a VERY long comment!!
Ps. There's a bit of a difference between vicious and viscous.....just wanted to be sure we're talking about the same intent here....both work to an extent
Thank you for such a detailed and in depth comment on my poem. Really appreciate your feedback. And it should read vicious! Well spotted haha I will change that. I wanted to capture the monotony of it all and that feeling of entrapment. I also focused on the repetition, hopefully picking up speed as things start to spiral out of control again. Thank you for reading 😊
Brilliant writing! Well done for being brave enough to share this x