Poem -
Where did you go?
Stagnant in rigorous slumber
Abandoned shell, where did you go?
Out through the open window
Old wives utterances still reside
No essence left of being
Embalmed cocoon ~ dressed in silk
Warmth erst embodied; now absent
Touched with imprinted memories
Abated blood (all ceased to flow)
Humours words unspoken
Last rasping rattles over
Lustre adrift between vacant eyes
Remnants of your final words echo still
Now sallow, waxen skin remains
Preserved, but still decaying
A distorted replica of what once was
Of who you were.
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There is something deeply uncanny about seeing the corpse of a loved one for the first time...it's as though this is the only time; in a culture surrounded by images of death: that the cold, simple reality of death is brought home to us.
This poem explores this idea with an evocative admixture of new freestyle poetry and references (some glancing, some blatant) to traditions and ideas surrounding death which go back centuries and span several cultures.
Dignified, melancholy...and really rather powerful.
your Jason XxXxXxXx
Thank you Sweetheart, Your words mean so much to me. I decided many months ago to try different forms as much of my poetry was very similar. You have really helped me so much to learn and develop my skills, I am truly grateful. I look at my work from last year and look at it now and I can really see the difference and much of that is down to your constant support and encouragement. Thank you
My Jason
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To be honest darling, I haven't done anything. From the very beginning you've been eager to (and more than capable of) growing and stretching yourself as a writer...which was one of things that drew me to your writing in the first place. You've never really needed my (or anyone else's) encouragement.
Your gratitude is appreciated...but misplaced. All the credit goes to the person you greet in the mirror everyday.
Love,
your Jason XxXxXxXx
Hey Sweetheart, My gratitude is far from misplaced, but I really love how much faith you have in my abilities, even when at times I suffer from so much self doubt.
Thank you for being so supportive my love
Your Lorna
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this really spoke to me ,,,,, You are such a great writer
Your writing is so precisely choreographed and structured to maximize its potency.
Thank you for sharing your creative commitment.
All the best. :)
Another well-thought out piece to get your teeth into. Thanks.
Death and the afterlife always capture the attention so forcibly. Keep sharing. Your works are such good reads.
:)
Thanks again Richard, I appreciate your words, the afterlife is such a mystery brings lots of thoughts
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