Whilst She Sleeps
She sleeps
Whilst others weep
Hearts cling to keep her flame burning bright
All the while, troubled thoughts poison their night
Weary heads
Wrapped in dread
Grapple to make sense of her resting bed
For it feels misplaced in time
So they call to the stars in that melanite sky
“Why oh why do the young have to die?”
But their twinkling eyes merely blink in the dark
To remind us all we are just a spark
A speck
A trace
In this vast open space
Where time brings no comfort of the ones felt erased
So, she sleeps
Whilst others weep
Hearts cling to keep her flame burning bright
All the while, troubled thoughts poison their night
And so in grief
Whilst she sleeps
It repeats...and repeats..
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wonderful poem
i loved it
Thanks so much Greg :) I am looking forward to reading some more of your story today x
WOW
Many thanks Pier for reading, liking and leaving a reaction to my poem. I am so grateful
Gwen :)
Wow...what a line! A stellar poem Gwen. Fabulous. Full of heartache but brilliant x
Thanks Being Me for the comment on my piece. I think that’s my favourite line
Gwen x
I just revisited this masterpiece and saw that I left no stars or likes - Eek! So sorry! I think I was so blown away with the words that I dived straight in to comment. I apologise for not leaving them but have rectified my appalling error x
Awe all good my friend :) many thanks for dropping by again and leaving your lovely stars xx
Heart wrenching Gwen...I feel a desperation in this...all things unstoppable, no control, nothing to make sense of because ...nothing makes sense. Eons of dark empty space where a light once shone...hugs 💟💟💟
That is right my friend, these losses leave a gaping whole for so many who loved them. Thank you for your empathetic words, lots of love and hugs and thanks for the like and pin too x 💗
What's that they say ~
~ "Only the good die young!"
This is a fabulous example of what you can accomplish with clever formatting and VERY powerful phrasing......some of the phrasing here is 'off the hook!!....A lovely and compelling piece of melancholy and the trumpeting of painful memories ~
~ "Where time brings no comfort of the one's felt erased..."
ALL STARS!!.....well done Lady Gwendoline!!.......LOVE & ROCKETS!!.....T xo : )
Thank you Tony for always being so supportive and providing me with such attentive feedback. It is always so helpful and a delight to read your words
Your friend
Gwen :)
wow Gwen! your talent shines in this spiritual write!...................................Jim
Wow thank you so much Jim, and I am so sorry for the late reply. Many many thanks for leaving me your lovely thoughts to this piece x
This is quite brilliant Gwen ..
You have managed to capture the very essence of my last period of on call duty ..
When I was hit from all sides (at the same time I might add) by the grieving and still very much in shock parents of a young teenage girl who could no longer cope with her subjectively perceived rejection ................................................................ :(
Sadly the incidence of self destruction continues to be on the increase and always leaves more questions unanswered alongside the very bitter aftertaste of invariable guilt and unknowing ..
Neville
Neville, thank you for sharing your experience here and reading this particular poem. I am so grateful to know you, and to have you read my work.
Sending a hug your way. I am so sorry to read about their loss. It is devastating for all involved 💛
Gwen x