As a published haiku poet and member of the HSA (Haiku Society of America), I gotta tell you that I adore haiku poetry, Lodigiana. Yours is very good!
Lines one and two display concrete imagery and a grammatical connection, as required.
You've chosen a more traditional, westernized 5-7-5 syllabic count, although in haiku today, seventeen syllables, OR LESS, is perfectly acceptable for modern-day, contemporary haiku poets writing in English.
Your "kigo", or seasonal reference, is a bit ambiguous. However, if the spider is quivering chances are it's a colder month, such as fall or early winter.
You satoriβthe final line that gives us that moment of insight, or 'Ah-ha!' moment haiku poetry is so well known forβis an interesting observation and summation of the poem as a whole.
Your haiku is written in present tense; a moment in nature captured in time.
Here is a link to my haiku book, if you're interested:
https://www.amazon.com/Haiku-Anthology-Robyn-Corum/dp/0692849882/ref=sr_1_4?ie=UTF8&qid=1522034068&sr=8-4&keywords=haiku+anthology
Hi Dean, wow that was so interesting ! Itβs incredible how so few words can mean so much and also need to convey so much..you have given me a very new perspective and I will be checking out your link. Thank you so much Dean.I really appreciate your skilled comments my friend.
Lodigiana x
You are very welcome, Lodigiana.
Haiku may be short and it may look simple. But it's far more difficult to write than most people think.
You did a marvelous job with yours.
I just posted one of my own...if you find the time.
Haiku Hugs! ~DeanΒ :}
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Hi Lodigiana! I love how your Haiku's are simple and yet so beautiful...I aspire to such an Haiku!!Β
Thank you so much StevieC xx
As a published haiku poet and member of the HSA (Haiku Society of America), I gotta tell you that I adore haiku poetry, Lodigiana. Yours is very good!
Lines one and two display concrete imagery and a grammatical connection, as required.
You've chosen a more traditional, westernized 5-7-5 syllabic count, although in haiku today, seventeen syllables, OR LESS, is perfectly acceptable for modern-day, contemporary haiku poets writing in English.
Your "kigo", or seasonal reference, is a bit ambiguous. However, if the spider is quivering chances are it's a colder month, such as fall or early winter.
You satoriβthe final line that gives us that moment of insight, or 'Ah-ha!' moment haiku poetry is so well known forβis an interesting observation and summation of the poem as a whole.
Your haiku is written in present tense; a moment in nature captured in time.
Here is a link to my haiku book, if you're interested:
https://www.amazon.com/Haiku-Anthology-Robyn-Corum/dp/0692849882/ref=sr_1_4?ie=UTF8&qid=1522034068&sr=8-4&keywords=haiku+anthology
Bravo, ~Dean
Hi Dean, wow that was so interesting ! Itβs incredible how so few words can mean so much and also need to convey so much..you have given me a very new perspective and I will be checking out your link. Thank you so much Dean.I really appreciate your skilled comments my friend.
Lodigiana x
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You are very welcome, Lodigiana.
Haiku may be short and it may look simple. But it's far more difficult to write than most people think.
You did a marvelous job with yours.
I just posted one of my own...if you find the time.
Haiku Hugs!
~DeanΒ :}
beautiful ink Anna, most enjoyable read
Thank you so much my darling..love hearing from you! x
LodigianaΒ