Poem -
Why I Cry Without Sound
A raised voice sets my
mind to racing
Years and years
of mental pacing
Doors kicked in
bookcases pulled down
Spines smashed
nose to the ground
Go live outside
anything demeaning
Be perfect, be perfect
or else be beaten
Just be small
quiet as a mouse
Be an unwanted guest
in your own house
For years and years
keep it up
Now look at you
you're all grown up
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Comments
Wow. I don`t know what to say, Lexi, it isn't very often that a poem such as this one succeeds in blowing me away. I have a soft spot for solid verse and rhyme. I also found the structure super engaging and easy to read. Bloody brilliant!!!
Thank you so much!! Just getting back into writing after several years off and pen to paper felt very healing last night.
Hello Lexi,
This has a lovely pace to its words, but also a sense of travelling which suits the piece as it journeys through to growing up. A good sense of the trials and tribulations spilled in your ink. A sense of a muted cry. Great writing and thanks for posting it
Gwen :)
Thank you so much for the feedback Gwen!! 💕
My Goodness LEXI !......what pops out at me is the fact that this is your first post in 6 or 7 years......and when considering this fact it adds so much MORE power and depth to the words and phrasing you have chosen to share with us here ~
~ "an unwanted guest, in your ow house...."
~ "Be perfect, be perfect, or else be beaten..."
~ "Years and years, of mental pacing...."
I have a strong inkling of what's going on here and I am so VERY sorry that I can offer no help accept to say that we are here for you on Cosmo......we can listen and offer advice but it is up to you to ask for help......I pray that I am wrong about my assumptions here.....But these words are far too powerful to be just a simple, poetic, fiction......ALL STARS & PINNED.....this is one of the bravest poems I have ever read dear poet sister!!.....Please, never stop writing LEXI......you have major poetic skills....and the formatting of this piece proves it!!......well done......LOVE & ROCKETS!!......T xo : )
Thank you so much for the love!!
This is fortunately not reflective of a situation that I’m currently in. I’ve been thinking a lot lately about my childhood and why I react to things the way that I do. Even the tone of someone’s voice can set me on edge!
I am in a great place in life now and just mentally working through some things. I had forgotten how helpful writing is with doing that. :)
-Lexi
Regardless....you haven't written here for several years LEXI....and yet, your words are more powerful, your formatting much improved, and your subject matter powerfully conveyed ~ You, are a writer my friend......please don't give up on it!!.......stay groovy!!......T xo : )