Your'e not my type
Your'e pretty but your not my type. What the fuck does that even mean? Are you saying im just pretty but not enough? The words struck me like a lighting bolt going through my head.
I'm going to pretend that your'e just blind even though im the one wearing glasses.
The truth is, im not just sure where i stand,and mostly because iv'e stumbled many more times then anything, and if that's the case..did i ever stand? Im the weird girl in the back like always, thats me the weird girl.
I used to get offended by being called weird but not so much anymore. I also used to get offended by being called in "introvert" but the truth is, my insides are screaming "Your'e a bitch and you ain't shit". But i was taught to be a good girl, with morals and yet you think im just pretty?
You want to know whats not my type? Someone who can blend in because whats the point of wearing black if your shoes scream neon? Why settle for less they they think your'e less? What the point if you have no point? Your'e pretty but your'e just not my type.........................................
No, your'e just not mine.
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Comments
What a story teller. Great narrative style.
I like your narrative style. Do you write fiction or articles too?
Favorite part:
Considerations for revision:
In the sentence above "your'e - you're" easy fix.
In the same sentence, "im -- I'm" or "I am"
In one area, I think (an) would sound better.
Setting the Tone: Emotions
I think the curse words set the tone for sarcasm, frustration and anger. They do aid in creating dramatic emotion in a poem. The risk is using too many of them. Then, it becomes a slight distraction.
I hope you don't mind me picking out these small typos.
I really enjoyed reading your poem.
Have a great evening.
Awh ty! My grammar is terrible lol I just manage :p
but thanks for the feed back!
Hello again :)
I don't mean to point out the little things. I use an editor to help me with spelling and grammar. When I read a poem here, I put it into the editor to check for issues. But, sometimes, I get carried away with trying to offer advice. I was in a creative writer’s workshop and they gave us a formula for writing reviews. Although, rating a poem or story is much harder to do. I'm dyslexic, by the way. I have a limited vocabular and I'm rusty on the mechanics. Thank you for the reply. I can't wait to read more of your work!
I'm learning too... :)
Im dyslexic too! So I completely understand and that’s pretty cool anyway thanks!!!
Looks like we're in good company here. I've met some fantastic authors so far. Every day is a new start to something great. I'm working on learning metered poetry, there is so much too it. Once I find a formula, it will be much easier.