A Note To Self
Into the streams which hold your self-esteemÂ
I clean and gleamÂ
Those dusty beamsÂ
So you may see the reflectionÂ
Which begs attentionÂ
Yet too scared to mention
Because of all the blightÂ
Infection from lifeÂ
That caused you strifeÂ
You feel so brokenÂ
Words left unspoken
Sit in rubbleÂ
From all the trouble-
That fellÂ
Bringing with itÂ
Your own personal hell
In which you dwellÂ
Hide within your broken shellÂ
Well... here I standÂ
With open handsÂ
I offer all I have to giveÂ
In hopeÂ
You see
There is still enough lightÂ
To take a chance on lifeÂ
Dreams donât have to reside in the mind
Just offer your heartÂ
Some peace
Be kindÂ
Self worth brings fortuneÂ
More priceless than any jewel
Bleeds out the cruelÂ
Live life as the foolÂ
And you will always reapÂ
An ever abundant knowledge from the deepÂ
Just listen to your own wordsÂ
The ones behind the fearÂ
Hold them closeÂ
All will become clearÂ
Now take these polished beams Iâve cleanedÂ
And have a good look at your self-esteemÂ
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Comments
Loved it. The metaphors, the flow on some of the verses. Well done!
Many thanks for stopping by and reading this one. So grateful of your feedback :)
Lovely verse Gwen, from the darkness comes light, I hope the sun shines as brilliantly as it can for the whole world.
hugs my friend â¤ď¸
â¤ď¸ hugs lovely. Going to pm you soon xxÂ
An inspiring and great write that offers hope to one and all Gwen.
Hope that almost forgotten uplifting virtue, but not after reading your equally uplifting poem.
And I like what you did with the words, your words,' Be kind'.
A wee bit bolder to stand out and shine brighter to add to your poem of inner self esteem and focus.
A little subliminal to register in a reader's mind and get your message over a little more.
Full honours and poetry kudos to you Gwen and I wish you well and thank you for writing and sharing your inspiring poem of hope.â¤ď¸
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Hello Shaun, wow thank you for your wonderful words and support. It is always such a pleasure to hear from you. I was definitely attempting some self care here. So lovely to read your thoughts on this. Happy writing my friend, I canât wait to read your next pieceÂ
your friend Gwen â¤ď¸
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Hello Shaun, wow thank you for your wonderful words and support. It is always such a pleasure to hear from you. I was definitely attempting some self care here. So lovely to read your thoughts on this. Happy writing my friend, I canât wait to read your next pieceÂ
your friend Gwen â¤ď¸
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What a write !!!Â
âSelf worth brings fortuneÂ
More priceless than any jewel
Bleeds out the cruel â Â
this stood out to me however the whole write was very resonating and powerful ! I also loved how you put âbe kindâ in bold amidst the whole write really emphasizing the importance of just being a forgiving our thoughtful person . Kudos to you on this one !!Â
Hello Shallow Waters,Â
so thrilled you enjoyed this one. I loved reading your connection and understanding of this piece. A wonderful feedback that lifts my mood, and feeds me much encouragement. Many many thanks đÂ
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I so see what you meanđđ love this piece. Thanks for sharing.Â
Thank you ever so much John for the read and lovely feedbackÂ
Gwen đ
This could very easily be made into a rap song .. a good one at that and whilst not my favourite musical genre the words themselves and consequently the message they collectively convey have a resounding inspirational quality and impact upon the reader .. and whilst I can not speak for anyone else, that is the magic I personally found here today ............................................................. N xÂ
Wow a rap? Gosh I wonder how that would sound. I often feel rap is very poetic just to a crazy beat đ A compliment my friend and so thank you so very much, and once again thank for looking back on my poetry. You are a truly kind humanÂ
Gwen x
although it may seem somewhat contentious, I think Bob Dylan was probably one of the very earliest rappers with songs like Subterranean Homesick Blues .. and tho' not a fan of Rap, I am of Dylan .. and yes, absolutely, my comment was intended as a compliment ..Â
Neville x