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Closing the Door

Closing the Door

Closing the door:
clutching brass
A firm grip.
With saturated palms,
unable to let go.
No will to sustain
freedom is only a twist of a handle.
Yet still
holding on tightly.

Pushes hard from the other side,
forcing the door.

The grip remains,
it's failing fast
panic spikes.
Unable to let go
pressing a foot against the bottom.

Pushes harder
the door waivers
A crack of light seeps into the room
almost tasting it's joy.

Pushing back,
reaching desperately for the table
blocking door.
the light is too blinding,
joy undeserving.
wedge it tight
keep it closed.

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Cherie Leigh

Hi Lorna..I have felt like this poor soul before....wanting to take chances, but scared too....I like the imagery of the closed door and the act of trying to open it..seeking hope in the form of light....great imagery....It is so nice to read your work again.Β  I am not really suppose to be on here now,..lol...but could not resist commenting on your poem...I hope to catch up better later this week..but very busy working on a novel...Love your poetry. xoΒ  Love n HugsΒ  CherieΒ  Β Β 

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Lorna Caizley

hi Cherie, somtimes its difficult open that door no matter how much you want to. Anxiety peaks and even with somone pushing from the other side, you still won't allow it to open. Thank you for commenting, it really means a lot to me
All my love Lorna xx

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linda wright

very suspensefullΒ  Β  writ eΒ  linda like iitΒ  ccheck out my nnnew oneΒ  Β desireΒ 
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Lorna Caizley

hi Linda
than k you so much for your comments, I'm happy to be back
love
Lorna x

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Lorna Caizley

thanks Lisa, I always love.your comments, I think I've got more learning to do before I can contemplate aΒ  book :)Β  but I'm glad you like my poems
All my loveΒ 
Lorna xx

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lodigiana

Your words ring so many personal bells!!! a wonderfully descriptive piece of work Lorna- loved it!..you are such a talented writer x
LodigianaΒ 

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Lorna Caizley

hi Lodigiana, Its difficult when anxiety hinders you in some way and I wanted to get that across. thank you so much for your kind words
Love Lorna x

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Tony Taylor

"Saturated palms, Panic spikes, Reaching desperately, Clutching brass ~ Closing The Door.."......anxiety is such quicksand!!......your wordplay here is outstanding.....came through loud and clear for me!! & any fellow sufferer will find this quite compelling!!.....tons-O-stars!!.....you're always a pleasure to read LORNA!!.....I pray this is nor dominant subject matter in your daily life......hang tough my friend.....for like all things,,,,,,"This too, shall pass!"......LOVE & ROCKETS!!.......T xo πŸ‘πŸ‘

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Lorna Caizley

hi thanks Tony,
I've had a few upheavals this year and I wrote this one a few months ago, when I still lived in my old house which I absolutely hated.... my anxiety was really at its worst, and I was trying to sort Xmas out and move house on my own. I also refused to accept.help.from those that wanted to be there as I'm exceptionally stubborn...but when I write about these things it helps.me put things in perspective

thank you as always I appreciate your kind words
All my loveΒ 
Lorna xx

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Larry Ran

My Dear Lorna,

Open door is shut
Closed forever to the pain
Now locked away

All my love,
Larry xxx

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Lorna Caizley

Hi Larry, I always love your wonderful haikus..thank you so muchΒ 
All my love to you and the lovely Linda.
Lorna xx

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Larry Ran

My dear Lorna,

As do I love yours.

All our love back at you,
Linda and Larry xxx

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