Poem -
Closing the Door
Closing the door:
clutching brass
A firm grip.
With saturated palms,
unable to let go.
No will to sustain
freedom is only a twist of a handle.
Yet still
holding on tightly.
Pushes hard from the other side,
forcing the door.
The grip remains,
it's failing fast
panic spikes.
Unable to let go
pressing a foot against the bottom.
Pushes harder
the door waivers
A crack of light seeps into the room
almost tasting it's joy.
Pushing back,
reaching desperately for the table
blocking door.
the light is too blinding,
joy undeserving.
wedge it tight
keep it closed.
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Comments
very suspensefull writ e linda like iit ccheck out my nnnew one desire
d t see yu writing
hi Linda
than k you so much for your comments, I'm happy to be back
love
Lorna x
Amazing write my friend. When will I see your book in print?
thanks Lisa, I always love.your comments, I think I've got more learning to do before I can contemplate a book :) but I'm glad you like my poems
All my love
Lorna xx
Your words ring so many personal bells!!! a wonderfully descriptive piece of work Lorna- loved it!..you are such a talented writer x
Lodigiana
hi Lodigiana, Its difficult when anxiety hinders you in some way and I wanted to get that across. thank you so much for your kind words
Love Lorna x
"Saturated palms, Panic spikes, Reaching desperately, Clutching brass ~ Closing The Door.."......anxiety is such quicksand!!......your wordplay here is outstanding.....came through loud and clear for me!! & any fellow sufferer will find this quite compelling!!.....tons-O-stars!!.....you're always a pleasure to read LORNA!!.....I pray this is nor dominant subject matter in your daily life......hang tough my friend.....for like all things,,,,,,"This too, shall pass!"......LOVE & ROCKETS!!.......T xo ??
hi thanks Tony,
I've had a few upheavals this year and I wrote this one a few months ago, when I still lived in my old house which I absolutely hated.... my anxiety was really at its worst, and I was trying to sort Xmas out and move house on my own. I also refused to accept.help.from those that wanted to be there as I'm exceptionally stubborn...but when I write about these things it helps.me put things in perspective
thank you as always I appreciate your kind words
All my love
Lorna xx
My Dear Lorna,
Open door is shut
Closed forever to the pain
Now locked away
All my love,
Larry xxx
Hi Larry, I always love your wonderful haikus..thank you so much
All my love to you and the lovely Linda.
Lorna xx
My dear Lorna,
As do I love yours.
All our love back at you,
Linda and Larry xxx
A first small step is all needed to come out the door. Well done.
Every now and then, whilst browsing, I stumble across something that reminds me why I first entered into this relationship I have with poetry ..
To suggest I enjoyed this page & its contents, would be something of an understatement ............... All Good Things, Neville :) x
Hi Neville,
you made my day with that comment, its been a long time since i was on here properly, its people like you who inspire with kind words and great poetry that keep people coming back and making this feel like such a welcoming place for writers. Cosmo has its issues like all platforms, but the fundamental idea of positivity promoting positivity keeps everything and everyone going.
Thank you so much
Lorna
:)
Take my word for it Lorna, you are absolutely much more than merely welcome :)
Ooh! So glad to discover this hidden gem and after reading wishing to find something equally as good and suspenseful.
For suspense hand in glove with darned good writing is wonderfully offered up here in spades.
Reads like somebody relating to a visually impaired person a frenetic scene from a Alfred Hitchcock move.
It's that good and breathtaking.
A superb piece of writing and thank you Lorna for making this reader's heart beat that little faster.
See you in a week my friend and remember, keep you chin up and one day at a time, for those little steady victories will get you through any troubles and life :) xx.
Thanks Shaun, that is really kind of you to say :)
glad you liked this one, yes I like a bit of suspense unfortunately the protagonist didn't open the door at the time but thankfully they're on the other side of it now hahaha
...enjoy yourself, and take good care
Lorna xx