Poem -
Critique du Soleil
Lifted upon the elephant's back,
As circus crowds do gather.
An easy hooray and echoed clap
Above the crowding lather .
Somewhat brief, yet brilliant starlet
Failing fast as hoards retreat.
Unnoticed now, in dusty scarletÂ
Burning fires now losing heat.
Smile not reaching her eyes at all
(New beauty) enters centre stage
Green vision, now bell of the ball
Once starlet; now locked in rage
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Hello Lorna...
​​​​​​For some reason I thought it was a going to be a different kind of hotd.?...
All is well I hope...
Great write!
Thank you for sharing...
sparrowsongÂ
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Yes all is well, thank you Sparrowsong, not sure where this one came from...it was in my head years ago...I wanted to write about the circus...bit never really finished it xx
This says so well many of the words I have so often tried to thread into one of my own personal favourite themes .. Only .. you have done it so much better .. Neville xx
Hi NevilleÂ
thanks for your comment, i think somtimes I overthink and then never finish my writing before starting something new.Â
But when you go back you have a different perspectiveÂ
lorna xxx
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The light that burns twice as bright burns half as long, certainly springs to mind after reading.
And the Hollywood star system when actress's get older and they no longer play bright young things, but middle aged moms.
Great 'nothing last forever' poem and you nailed it with rapt originality here .
See and read you soon LornaÂ
Shaun xx
Hi Shaun
Somtimes that middle age mom is the better part hahah...on occasion maybe... which I'm not able to think of right now hahah
but yes you are right nothing is really permanent...everyone moves on at some pointÂ
thanks for your lovely commentÂ
LornaÂ
xxx